Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three- year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city

First of all in London best thing is range of shops. Which is high ratio in 1st year they are 45%. The ratio are same continiosly.And there is a lot of opportunities. If you are new are not

And diffrents types of people were there in London. When you are living in the fist time you have no idea about museum and art galleries. When you are famliers with this areas you will vizit in a week. Night life are remain constant. And transport inversly propotion.

Will wrost thing is cost of living is high expancive. Every person can,t afford.As alway road are conjusted where traffic are always block. In start crime rate is high, because you dont no every thing ,but greullay you understand every thing .Cost of housing and transport are almost same.

Overall in London city range of shops and work opportunities is high as compare to mixture of peeople .But living expanse conjusted road are also problem.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies several relevant features, including shops, job opportunities, museums, nightlife, transport, living costs, congestion, crime and housing. However, the report only minimally describes the charts: it gives almost no accurate year-by-year comparisons and omits the separate line graph on litter, air quality and noise. Some statements are unclear or unsupported, such as saying the best-feature ratio stays “same continuously” and that crime is high “because you dont no every thing.” The overview also does not capture the main patterns across the three years. To improve, summarise the key highs and changes, compare years using the chart figures, and avoid adding explanations that the survey does not provide.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: the response moves from positive features to negative features and ends with an overall statement. This gives the reader a rough sense of the intended structure. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow, and several ideas are disconnected or incomplete, for example, “If you are new are not” and “And transport inversly propotion.” Linking phrases such as “First of all” and “Overall” are used, but they do not make the relationships between points clear. Group the information into a clear introduction, overview and detail paragraphs, and use comparisons and references to connect related figures rather than shifting into personal explanations.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “range of shops,” “job opportunities,” “crime rate,” and “cost of housing,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and often inaccurate, with spelling and word-choice problems that make parts difficult to understand: “continiosly,” “famliers,” “vizit,” “wrost,” “expancive,” and “conjusted.” Some expressions are also unsuitable for describing survey data, such as “Night life are remain constant” and “transport inversly propotion.” Build a more precise set of chart-reporting terms, including “percentage,” “increased,” “declined,” “remained relatively stable,” and “was the most frequently cited,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple statements and a few longer constructions, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently obscure meaning. Examples include “best thing is range of shops,” “The ratio are same,” “Night life are remain constant,” and “Every person can,t afford.” There are recurring problems with articles, subject–verb agreement, verb forms, sentence boundaries and punctuation. Several fragments, including “If you are new are not,” do not form complete ideas. Use straightforward, complete sentences first, with accurate subjects and verbs, then add controlled comparisons such as “The figure for shops fell slightly in Year 2 before rising in Year 3.” Proofread for sentence boundaries and agreement.

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