Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

London is the most beatiful country . Every one wants to went to the london because its provide more opportunties for workes and students students gives more benifecient opportuntie from london education.In lodon people most interested in shopping and the range of shopping in london is very high then other things .in the first year ,range of shopping is very high and the second year shopping range decrease some problems but when third year come the shopping range once more time increase.

we talk about job opportunties in London, the job opportunties in first year high but less thsn shopping range but the second year job opportunties for people decrease then people face some difficulties but second year job opportunties increase a little bit .Then we talk about mixture of people means population the first year population will increase second year the same population but third year population increase .The museums and art galleries in london the first year museums and art galleries is not most in london when the time pass these things are avalible slowly slowly in london .then we talk about night life in london .Night life is very less then other things then we talk about in upper paragraph .Then the third year night life will increase .And the transport in first year little bit increase and then dearce and then increase. The best thing for me living in london is Job opportunties. The worst thing about living in london is crime .the mostly crime happen in london. in first thing cost of living a little increase air population 60% above.and the noise range is 60%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies some relevant positive features, especially shopping and job opportunities, and attempts to describe changes across the three years. However, it only minimally covers the task: it gives no clear overview of the main patterns and largely omits the chart about the worst aspects and the line graph on whether issues are major problems. Several details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, crime is not consistently the worst concern, and the figures for litter, air quality and noise are confused in the closing sentences. The personal statement, “The best thing for me,” is not appropriate for an objective report. To improve, summarise the strongest overall trends and compare key figures from all three visuals accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some attempt to group information by topic, and sequencing phrases such as “in the first year,” “the second year” and “then” help signal movement through the data. However, the response is not arranged into clear report sections, and ideas often run together in a long paragraph. Repeated transitions such as “then we talk about” make the progression mechanical, while references such as “these things” and “the things in upper paragraph” are not always clear. The discussion also jumps from positive features to personal opinion and then to selected negative figures without a logical structure. Use separate paragraphs for an overview, positive features, and negative features/problems, and connect comparisons directly rather than narrating each chart item in turn.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a basic set of topic words, including “job opportunities,” “mixture of people,” “museums and art galleries,” and “crime,” so the reader can identify some intended categories. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often inaccurate, which strains understanding. Phrases such as “range of shopping,” “population will increase” for the mixture of people, and “air population” do not express the chart labels precisely. There are also frequent spelling errors, including “beatiful,” “opportunties,” “benifecient,” and “lodon.” Build a reliable vocabulary set for describing survey categories and trends, and check spelling. Prefer exact labels such as “range of shops” and “air quality,” with verbs such as “rose,” “fell” and “remained stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and time clauses, for example, “when third year come,” but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Problems include verb forms and agreement (“Every one wants to went,” “the job opportunties … high”), missing or incorrect articles (“in first year”), and unclear tense changes (“the first year population will increase”). Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, with many ideas joined by full stops or commas without clear structure. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, such as “The figure fell in Year 2, then rose slightly in Year 3,” before adding subordinate clauses. Consistent past-tense reporting and complete sentences would make the information easier to understand.

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