Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given image illustrates the outcome of a survey held over a quarter year period to know about the thoughts of the residents about London.

As we can see there are many activites for a living in London. Firstly range of shops which was preety high but have declined now to 40%, secondly the job opportunities are also the same over the three years and the same is for the mixture of people, if we come to the museums and art galleries here we can see quite a pump also for the night life and the transport too.

The best things of living in London is the city itself it's one of the best cities in UK. We can approach different people cause there are a lot of people from different countries in which some are tourists while the others have a living. In London we also get many oppurtunities of jobs and having a bright future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies several positive features, including shops, employment, the mix of people, museums, nightlife and transport, but it does not provide a report that adequately describes the charts. It omits the entire information about the worst aspects of London and the line graph on whether problems are major. The overview is replaced by personal opinions such as “it’s one of the best cities in UK” and comments about tourists and future prospects, which are not shown in the data. Some figures are mentioned vaguely or inaccurately: shops are said to have declined “to 40%,” while the chart shows roughly 45%, 42% and 43%; other trends are not supported with figures. To improve, summarise the main patterns across all three visuals and select accurate comparisons from each.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence, beginning with an introduction and then moving through some of the positive features, and linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “secondly” and “if we come to” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the response has no clear overview or well-developed paragraph structure, and the final paragraph shifts from chart reporting to personal commentary. The long second paragraph strings together several categories with commas, making the relationships between points difficult to follow. References such as “the same” are also unclear because they do not specify which values or trends are being compared. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, using clear comparisons and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “job opportunities,” “mixture of people,” “museums and art galleries,” and “transport,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are informal, imprecise or unsuitable for an academic chart report. Phrases such as “quite a pump,” “the city itself” and “having a bright future” do not clearly describe the data, while “activites” and “oppurtunities” show spelling errors. Repetition of “same” and “many” also limits precision. Use standard chart-report language to describe changes and comparisons, and check spelling. For example, replace vague wording with terms such as “increased slightly,” “remained stable” or “was the most popular feature,” where the figures support them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sentence that lists several categories and a clause beginning “if we come to the museums.” However, control is uneven, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and punctuation sometimes make the meaning less clear. For example, “range of shops which was … but have declined” shifts from singular agreement to a plural verb, and “The best things … is” has a subject–verb agreement error. The opening phrase “held over a quarter year period” also has an awkward grammatical construction. Sentence boundaries are weak in the long list, and apostrophes are used inconsistently. Build shorter, complete sentences and check agreement and tense in each one.

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