Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart elucidates information about what are the best things about living in London . The chart compares differences categories and present the data in number or percentage . Overall it is clear that there are noticeable differences among the categories shown in the chart . According to the chart the first main activity is range of shops that 1st year is best and the 2nd year is low and the 3rd is normal The next activity is job opportunities that percentage is first year is good and the 2 year is normal and the 3rd year is normal the next work is mixture of people that 1st year is high the 2nd year is normal and the 3rd year is normal .The next activity is night life in 1st year is low 2nd year is normal and the 3rd year is low . The next activity is transport is first year is high the 2nd year is low and the 3rd year is normal and the next main activity is museums and art galleries in 1st year is low the second year is normal and the third year is high . The chart compares the categories among the chart

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies several relevant positive features, including shops, job opportunities, the mix of people, nightlife, transport, and museums and galleries. However, it only minimally reports the visual: it omits the entire chart on the worst aspects and the line graph on problems, and gives no reliable overview of the main patterns. Descriptions such as “high,” “normal,” and “low” are vague and do not explain the percentages or make meaningful comparisons; for example, shops were the leading positive feature in all three years, while the figures for museums and galleries rose. Some claims are also inaccurate or unclear, such as calling transport “high” in Year 1. Focus on the main trends across all three visuals and support them with selected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to introduce the charts and then describe individual categories, so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the response has little logical progression: it moves through positive categories one by one without grouping related information or comparing years, and it ends by repeating that the chart compares categories. The repeated sequence “The next activity…” makes the report mechanical, while the opening and closing do not provide a useful overview. Several long sentences run together, with limited punctuation and unclear links between clauses. Organise the report into an introduction, a concise overview, and paragraphs that group the main positive and negative findings; use comparisons to connect the data rather than repeating the same transition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “range of shops,” “job opportunities,” “mixture of people,” and “museums and art galleries,” which makes the subject identifiable. However, the vocabulary is repetitive and often too general for describing data. Words such as “good,” “normal,” “high,” and “low” do not communicate precise changes or comparisons, and “activity” and “work” are not suitable labels for these survey categories. Phrases such as “elucidates information” and “compares differences categories” are awkward and reduce clarity. Build a small range of accurate reporting language, such as “accounted for,” “remained stable,” “rose,” and “declined,” and use “proportion” or “percentage” when describing the figures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to form longer sentences and uses basic present-tense reporting, but grammatical control is weak and sentence patterns are highly repetitive. Errors include “the chart compares differences categories,” “the first main activity is range of shops that 1st year is best,” and “night life in 1st year is low,” where clauses are incomplete or incorrectly connected. Agreement and article use are also problematic, as in “the 2nd year is low,” which treats a year as the measured value rather than the percentage. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing full stops and spaces around clauses. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “The proportion selecting shops fell from 45% in Year 1 to about 42% in Year 3.”

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