Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart and line graph below illustrates the reults of a survey conducted over a three year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

The survey shows percentage of people, who told what are the best things about living in London as well as what are the worst things about living in london.

Line graph shows are liter, air quality and noise a major problem in london. First year survey reults shows that 70 percent people said yes liter is a major problem, 65 percent people said says yes air quality is also a major problem, and 59 percent people said noise is a problem. In second year survey more people said that liter is problem but in third year survry this percentage decreases.

People percentage who said that range of the shops is the best thing about living in london is 45 percent highest among all other reasons. In second and third survey this percentage remain highest. Job opportunities hold second highest opinion of people about 38 percent people said this is best thing living in london in first year survey. Smallest percentage of people said that transport in a best thing. What are the worst things living in london? 56 percent people said cost of living is worst thing in first year survey. only about 25 percent people said that transport is worst thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the survey’s general subject and report some relevant findings, including the prominence of shops and the rise and subsequent fall in concern about litter. However, the response covers the charts only partially and gives no clear overview of the main patterns across all three visuals. Several figures or descriptions are inaccurate: first-year air quality is about 66%, not 65% (a small difference), but the worst feature is reported as cost of living at 56%, whereas crime is about 56% and cost of living about 57%; transport is around 35% in Year 1 and 27% thereafter, not 25%. The best-things chart also includes several categories that are not discussed. Select the key highs, lows and changes, and compare them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the survey, discusses the line graph, then moves to the best and worst aspects. This gives the reader some sense of the chart groups, and phrases such as “In second year” help signal time. However, the organisation is not fully controlled: the opening repeats the task description, and the final paragraph shifts abruptly from best features to worst features without a clear transition or a concluding overview. Some references are also unclear, such as “this percentage” when several figures have just been mentioned. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and key comparisons, and connect each figure explicitly to its category and year.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “percentage,” “job opportunities,” “air quality,” and “major problem,” so the reader can generally identify the subject of each point. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “best thing” and “worst thing” throughout. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “reults,” “liter,” “london,” and “survry,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the report. Some collocations are awkward, for example “people said yes litter is a major problem.” Build a more varied set of chart-reporting expressions and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the main message is usually understandable, but grammatical errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The bar chart and line graph below illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “The survey shows percentage of people, who told what are…” has missing articles and an awkward clause structure. “Line graph shows are liter…” is also incomplete, and “Smallest percentage of people said that transport in a best thing” contains errors in articles and sentence construction. There is little evidence of accurate complex structures. Practise complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation when combining clauses.

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