Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

After the survey of people views about London we concluded some results. In result we have observed that some things are improved, some things becomes weak, and on the other hand some things remains the same in 2 years. We will discuss them step wise first we will discuss improved things, secondly, the things which are weak and at laste we will discuss the things that remains same.

According to survey,the coast of living is decreased 10%,transport charges had decreased in two years.The number of people to do their work and enjiyment at night increased by 4%,and the number of art galliries are also increased in 2 years.

On the other hand, mixture of people decreased by 2%,crime rate decreased by 12% and number of job opertunities are by 2% and range of shopes are decreased by 2% in 2 years.

And the way of transport remains same in 2years..

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies a few changes, such as lower reported figures for cost of living and crime and increases in nightlife and museums/art galleries, but it does not give a reliable overview of the charts. Several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: the cost of living falls by about seven percentage points from Year 1 to Year 3, not 10%; crime falls by about 16 points, not 12%; and the mixture of people changes only slightly. The claim that transport “remains same” is also unsupported, since the worst-things transport figure drops and then stays level, while the best-things figure varies. Most importantly, the report omits the litter, air-quality and noise results and gives little coverage of the main positive and negative features. Select key highs, lows and trends across all three visuals, and report them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is an attempt to organise the response by grouping changes, using an opening plan and transitions such as “On the other hand.” This gives the reader some sense of sequence, and the ideas are separated into paragraphs. However, the announced structure is not followed: the introduction promises improved, weakened and unchanged features, but the report does not clearly complete these categories or cover all three charts. The opening is wordy and repetitive, and phrases such as “first,” “secondly,” and “at laste” make the organisation feel mechanical. Some references are also unclear, particularly “some things” and “the number of people to do their work.” Use a concise overview, then organise details by chart or by positive and negative trends, with clear links between comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “survey,” “decreased,” “increased,” “crime rate,” and “art galleries,” so the general topic is usually recognisable. However, vocabulary is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the data difficult to interpret. “Coast of living” should be “cost of living,” while “transport charges” is not the same as the chart’s category, “transport.” “Things are weak” and “the number of people to do their work and enjiyment at night” do not express the intended comparisons clearly. Spelling errors such as “opertunities,” “shopes,” and “galliries” also reduce precision. Learn the chart labels and use accurate trend language, such as “rose slightly,” “fell,” and “remained stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sequence of clauses in the introduction and comparisons joined with “and” and “on the other hand.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation frequently make the report awkward. For example, “some things becomes weak” has incorrect agreement, while “some things remains the same” repeats this problem. “After the survey of people views about London we concluded some results” has an unclear grammatical structure, and “the number of job opportunities are by 2%” is incomplete. Commas are often missing after introductory phrases, and the final sentence has an unnecessary repeated full stop. Practise complete, direct comparison sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, for example, “The proportion citing crime fell over the period.”

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