Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

According to the graph, best things in London,for living were the transport system, job opportunities and sources of enjoyment.On the other side the people faced many pr problems such as, air pollution ,litter and noise pollution.

Overall,in London there was a huge range of shops which was the best source of jobs for people living there. transport was also a big opportunity for individual employment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies a few relevant topics, including transport, job opportunities, shops, litter, air quality and noise, but it does not adequately describe the charts or compare the results across the three years. Some claims are inaccurate: the best-rated feature was the range of shops, not transport, and the text incorrectly says shops were the best source of jobs and transport an employment opportunity. It also omits key worst aspects such as cost of living, traffic congestion and crime, and gives no figures or meaningful trends. The report is substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the task only minimally addressed. To improve, include a clear overview and select accurate comparisons supported by data from each chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an opening statement and a second paragraph beginning “Overall,” and the contrast marker “On the other side” signals a shift in topic. However, the ideas do not progress into a clear report: positive features and problems are mentioned briefly, then the final paragraph introduces unsupported links between shops, jobs and transport. The paragraphs are not developed enough to guide the reader through the three visuals, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent, as in “London,for” and “Overall,in.” Organise the report into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, using clear links between the charts and comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, such as “job opportunities,” “air pollution,” “litter” and “noise pollution,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural for describing survey data. “Sources of enjoyment” is vague, while “a big opportunity for individual employment” does not accurately express the chart’s transport category. “Best source of jobs” also confuses shops with employment opportunities. There are visible spelling and word-choice problems, including “pr problems” and “huge range” where a more neutral description would suit an academic report. Use the chart’s category labels accurately and choose precise terms for proportions, rankings and changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes simple statements and a basic contrast structure, for example “On the other side the people faced many…” and “Overall, in London there was…”. Meaning is generally recoverable, but grammatical control is uneven. The opening phrase “best things in London,for living were” has awkward word order and punctuation, and “there was a huge range of shops which was the best source” has an unclear reference and agreement pattern. Commas are often misplaced or missing, and spacing around punctuation is inconsistent. The response relies on a narrow set of sentence patterns, with little accurate complex structure. Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences and use relative clauses only when their reference is unambiguous.

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