Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graphs and line graph illustrate information about the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to identify what people who live in london think of the city. I will explain the percentages of best and worst things about living in london.

Overall, all these things are major problems in london. The best thing in london year one the range of shops are highest point in the figure. And the lowest point is transport in given diagram. Looking at the details, year one are range of shops are a peak point. The job opportunities, and mixture of people are same point and the 35% in the figure. The night life is less in the diagram, And the 25% in given figure. The worst things about living in london the cost of living,and traffic congestion are same 50% in the given figure.And the transport are lowest point in the diagram. In addition, The noise in year 1 same point in the figure. The air quality in year 2 change point in the diagram. And last is litter are very difference in the given diagram

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the survey’s subject and attempt to cover the positive, negative and problem charts, but the report responds only minimally to the data. Some key details are inaccurate: in Year 1, job opportunities were about 38% and the mixture of people 36%, not both 35%; night life was about 22%, rather than 25%. You also say cost of living and traffic congestion were both 50% in Year 1, although they were approximately 57% and 56%. The overview that “all these things are major problems” is too broad and does not summarise the main patterns. The final chart is mentioned, but its trends are not explained. Select the most important comparisons and report them accurately, including clear overall trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt at a report structure: an introduction, an overview beginning “Overall,” and further details introduced by “Looking at the details” and “In addition.” However, the information is not arranged in a clear progression. Positive features, negative features and the final problem chart are mixed or treated in fragments, and several statements—such as “The air quality in year 2 change point”—do not make the relationship between the data and the claim clear. Linking words are limited and sometimes do not show a meaningful connection. Organise the report into a clear overview followed by separate paragraphs for the positive and negative findings, grouping the final chart with the relevant comparisons. Use references and transitions that make each comparison easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “figure,” “diagram,” “point” and “given.” Some task-related terms are appropriate, including “job opportunities,” “traffic congestion” and “air quality,” so the reader can recognise the categories being discussed. However, phrases such as “a peak point,” “change point” and “very difference” are inaccurate or unnatural and make the descriptions less precise. Use standard language for describing charts, such as “highest proportion,” “remained stable,” “fell” and “varied.” Check spelling and capitalisation as well: “London” should be capitalised consistently. A wider, more accurate set of trend and comparison terms would make the report clearer and less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, and frequent errors in sentence structure and agreement sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The best thing in london year one the range of shops are highest point” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “year one are range of shops are a peak point” has faulty agreement and article use. In “The job opportunities, and mixture of people are same point,” the comparison is not formed correctly. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including sentence-initial lowercase “the” and missing spaces after full stops. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use accurate comparative structures—for example, “The range of shops was the most popular feature in Year 1.”

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