Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the best about living london is the range and variety of shop top most in first year you will be shocked by wast variety of shop and secound thing which cas easly noticed is the number of jobs. you can not sit free and you can't give excuses that you don't have job and also third thing is nature of the people of london is also very good like you need some thing urgent the people of london will not think a secound tought and they will give you instantly and if we talk about te night life i personaly think is not good enough there no night lighting show and also if you explore london so the only good time is day time and transport is also lacking in london they should work on there transport like other think show in the is comparetivly good transport is major back;lash for them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies several relevant positive features, including shops, job opportunities, the people, nightlife and transport, so it shows some awareness of the chart’s subject. However, it does not provide a report of the visual data: there is no overview of the main patterns, no percentages or year-by-year comparisons, and the discussion shifts into personal opinions and advice, such as saying London has no “night lighting show.” The task also includes the worst aspects of living in London and whether litter, air quality and noise are major problems, but these are not addressed. As a result, the response only minimally and tangentially fulfils the reporting task. Focus on summarising the chart’s key findings and supporting them with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a loose sequence from shops to jobs, people, nightlife and transport, and phrases such as “second thing” and “third thing” signal movement between points. However, the response is presented as one long, loosely connected passage, with no clear introduction, overview or paragraphing to guide the reader. Connections between ideas are often unclear: “and also if we talk about the night life” leads into personal commentary rather than a comparison of chart information, while “other think show in the is comparetivly good” is difficult to follow. Repeated use of “and also” and “if” does not create a clear progression. Organise the report into paragraphs and use linking language to compare the years and group related findings.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “range,” “variety,” “jobs,” “night life” and “transport,” and attempts phrases such as “major backlash.” This gives it a basic vocabulary for discussing city life. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to understand, for example “wast variety,” “cas easly noticed,” “nature of the people” and “major back;lash.” Some expressions are also imprecise for an academic chart report: “you will be shocked” and “you can not sit free” are conversational and do not describe the data clearly. Build a more accurate set of terms for reporting proportions and trends, such as “accounted for,” “remained stable” and “declined,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas using clauses, for example “if we talk about the night life i personaly think is not good enough,” but sentence structures are very limited and frequently faulty. Missing or incorrect articles and verb forms occur in phrases such as “the best about living london is,” “there no night lighting show” and “the people of london will not think a secound tought.” Long sentences joined mainly by “and” also lack reliable punctuation, making relationships between clauses unclear. These errors sometimes distort the intended meaning, particularly in the final sentence. Practise writing short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then add accurate comparisons using controlled subordinate clauses. Use full stops and capital letters to separate the report’s main points.

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