Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The illustration gives information about the results of three years of university conducted the survey.Overall, in the best things the numbers of shops are at the high position in London but if we compare the worst things we can see that the cost of living to much high and reached at 65`% in the first year.

It is quite evident from the bar chart,best things in the university of London at three years.In first year ratio of jobs was40 percent ,in second year was 35percent and in third year was 37 percent.

Furthermore, crimes rate are to high in fisrt year about more than fifty five , gradually decrease in second year but also jumped in third year.

There are also three major problems in the university air quality, noise and litter.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the broad topic and make a basic attempt to compare positive and negative aspects, but the report covers the charts only minimally. The claim that shops are the most popular positive feature is supported, yet the stated 65% for the cost of living in Year 1 is inaccurate; the chart shows about 57%. The jobs figures are also misreported: they are approximately 38%, 35% and 35%, not 40%, 35% and 37%. Crime does fall after Year 1 and rises slightly in Year 3, but the report gives no clear figures. The final sentence names the three problems but does not describe their trends. The response is also 18 words below the required minimum. Include a clear overview and accurate comparisons across all three charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening and overview are followed by comments on positive features, crime and major problems. Linking expressions such as “Overall” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the charts and comparisons are not clearly separated, and some references are unclear—for example, “the best things in the university of London” does not clearly identify the survey results. The final sentence introduces the third chart without connecting it to the earlier discussion. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and the main chart comparisons, and group related figures together. Clearer referencing and more purposeful links would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the general subject, with relevant terms such as “cost of living,” “crime rate,” “air quality” and “litter.” You also attempt evaluative and trend language, including “high position” and “gradually decrease.” However, the range is limited and several choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “numbers of shops,” “to much high,” and “university conducted the survey.” These expressions make some information harder to interpret. Spelling errors, including “fisrt,” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of chart-reporting phrases, such as “the proportion citing,” “ranked highest,” and “declined,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a comparison introduced by “but” and a trend description using “gradually.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the report difficult to understand. For example, “The illustration gives information about the results of three years of university conducted the survey” has an unclear sentence structure, while “the cost of living to much high” lacks a correct verb construction. There are also problems with articles, agreement and punctuation, as in “In first year ratio of jobs was40 percent” and “crimes rate are.” Use complete, straightforward sentence patterns first, with accurate articles and verb forms, and leave spaces after punctuation. Then practise combining comparisons accurately.

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