Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

What are the best things about living in London?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The presented column chart indicates people who live in london they think about cities worst things and good things. Data was about 3 years.The data is calibrated in percentage.

Overall, it is quite evident from the graph that range of shop will got the most preference by the first then it will be declined and worst things about city.The cost of living declined by year to year and most significant upturn seen in traffic congestion it was most worst thing of city.

It is conspicious that people get best things in living get good facility range of shops, job opportunity, mixture of will be incline

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and the three-year period, and you attempt an overview by mentioning the range of shops and cost of living. However, the report responds only minimally to the task: it does not describe the three charts in a balanced way, and the final sentence is unfinished. Some claims are inaccurate or unclear. For example, the range of shops was highest in Year 1, but it fell in Year 2 and rose slightly in Year 3; it did not simply decline. Traffic congestion did not show the “most significant upturn”: it was level between Years 1 and 2, then decreased. The response also omits the major-problem chart and most key comparisons. It is 45 words below the required minimum, which further limits the detail you can provide. Select and compare the main features from all charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and a further detail paragraph. The opening also signals the time period and measurement unit, giving the reader some context. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview combines unrelated points in an unclear sentence: “the cost of living declined by year to year and most significant upturn seen in traffic congestion.” The final paragraph stops after “mixture of will be incline,” so the discussion has no clear completion. Linking and referencing are limited, and phrases such as “first” do not clearly identify a year. Use one paragraph to summarise the overall patterns, then separate paragraphs for the positive and negative findings, with clear year references and comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “preference,” “cost of living,” and “traffic congestion,” and you attempt more formal wording such as “significant upturn.” This gives you some range, but word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unclear, sometimes making the intended meaning hard to recover. For instance, “range of shop will got the most preference” is not a natural way to describe the most popular feature, while “most worst thing” is an incorrect and repetitive expression. “Conspicious” is also misspelled, and “mixture of will be incline” is not intelligible. Aim for precise chart-reporting phrases such as “was the most popular feature” and “the proportion fell,” and check spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including “Overall, it is quite evident from the graph that…,” but control is weak and errors frequently obscure meaning. The opening has problems with clause structure and agreement: “indicates people who live in london they think” needs a clear construction such as “shows what people living in London think.” Verb forms are also unreliable in “will got” and “will be declined,” and the sentence about the cost of living lacks a clear grammatical structure. The final sentence is incomplete, leaving its main idea unfinished. Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, as in “years.The.” Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and complete sentences, checking that each sentence has a clear subject and verb before adding complex clauses.

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