Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Most people in different countries tend to continue their education after school and also wide range of courses are availible in universities which is a positive develoment.

People are the purusing further education because of the competition in the industries nowadays, In which people get job based on qualifications and experience they have and to land a job that pays well. For example, For better career opppurtunities and higher salaries,which demand higher qualification, and for PHDs alot of international scholarships are avalible globally that offers monthly allowance, accomodation and health insurance,which motivates students to get it. Furthermore higher education also help in the well being of society and it expands a person perspective to make good desicion for himself and for people around him.

On the other hand, Universities are also offering different courses becase of the high demand of it in the market. For example Artificial intelligence ,Before 2021 people did not much about AI but when chatgpt was released which results in the increase of value of it and now every application is using ai and it demand also grew which nowadays is compulsory subject in every department, while in some universities there is seperate department for it.

Furthermore, different fields like engineering,bussiness and IT is also expanding and almost every university offer these courses.

Almost all universities provide a range of courses, and demand for it is also increases every year, so people compete to get a high salay job, and i think it is a positive development which not only help in getting high pay job but also help the society to provide better education and better human beings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you consider the growth in further education and course choice a positive development, and you return to this view in the conclusion. You address both aspects of the prompt by discussing why people continue studying and why universities add courses. The points about career prospects, scholarships, social benefits and changing demand for AI are relevant. However, some ideas are more fully explained than others. The scholarship example is specific, while the claim that higher education improves society and helps people make good decisions is asserted rather than supported. The AI example also needs a clearer link to the benefits of a wider course range. Develop these points with explanation or a concrete example so the argument is more consistently supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, with each body paragraph focusing on a related aspect of the topic. Connectors such as “For example” and “Furthermore” help signal examples and additions. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. The first body paragraph moves from job competition to scholarships and then to social well-being without clearly showing how the points connect. The AI example also contains a long, loosely connected sequence of claims. Some linking is repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “Furthermore” and “For example.” Organise each paragraph around one main claim, then explain and illustrate it, and use clearer referencing to show how each sentence relates to that claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “qualifications,” “career opportunities,” “scholarships,” “higher education” and “artificial intelligence,” which allows you to discuss the subject. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “monthly allowance” and “health insurance.” However, spelling errors are noticeable, including “availible,” “develoment,” “opppurtunities” and “accomodation,” and some word choices or collocations are imprecise. For example, “the value of it” is vague when referring to AI, and “high salay job” is not a natural phrase. Build accuracy by checking spelling and choosing precise collocations; for instance, refer to “demand for AI skills” or “well-paid employment” rather than relying on general wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including explanations with “because” and clauses introduced by “which.” This gives the response some structural variety, and the main ideas are generally understandable. However, errors in sentence construction and agreement recur. For example, “higher education also help” needs subject–verb agreement, while “demand for it is also increases” combines incompatible verb forms. The sentence beginning “For example, For better career opportunities…” is a fragment, and the long AI sentence joins several ideas without clear grammatical boundaries. Improve control by checking each sentence for a complete subject and verb, consistent agreement, and clear punctuation. Shorter sentences would help you express the complex points more accurately.

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