Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased. I strongly support and perhaps it is a positive development for the society as well as for the country.

If a person wants to be educated, nothing can stop him from being that one. Perhaps it puts a huge impact for the society by becoming a valuable asset. Higher education should be free because it gives equal opportunities to students but in our society these opportunity are very low. That's why many of students are lack behind from higher studies.Many talented students cannot afford university fees.

But in recent time, students can earn and also provide his tuition fees. Thus they can learn or continue their studies even after high school. Besides the social awareness has also raised which motivated them a lot. Moreover they can also do some part-time job even after getting admitted for the higher studies. For the amount of students, the range of course available at University and college has also increased. Therefore learning opportunity are also available for the students who were keen on learing.

So increasing the number of students day-by-day is an indication that our youth are interested for the higher studies which can reduce unemployment and for the betterment of the society the government should must increase the opportunities of job sector. Some of non governmental organization should also step forward to help these future graduates

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a clear positive position, saying that wider access to higher education can benefit society and reduce unemployment. Relevant points include students earning money to pay tuition and the need for more job opportunities. However, the response addresses the topic only partially: it focuses mainly on access and affordability, while the effect of the increased range of courses receives little explanation. Several claims, such as education creating a “valuable asset” for society, need a specific example or clearer reasoning. The conclusion also introduces government and NGO support without fully connecting these proposals to your main argument. The response is 224 words, so it is 26 words below the required minimum; this limits the space available to develop and support your ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a concluding statement. Linking expressions such as “Besides,” “Moreover” and “Therefore” help signal relationships between points. However, progression is not consistently clear, and some connections feel mechanical or incomplete. For example, “For the amount of students” does not clearly explain why course availability has increased, while the move from students’ part-time work to the range of courses needs a clearer link. The final sentence about NGOs also feels added rather than developed from the preceding point. Organise each paragraph around one main idea, then explain how it supports your position and use referencing to make connections between sentences clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “higher education,” “tuition fees,” “part-time job,” “unemployment” and “opportunities.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “students are lack behind from higher studies” and “interested for the higher studies” do not express the intended ideas naturally; “valuable asset” is also vague in this context. There are spelling errors such as “learing,” and repeated use of “students,” “society” and “opportunities” reduces variety. Build a more precise vocabulary for access, course choice and employment, and check spelling and common word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional opening (“If a person wants to be educated…”) and a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “Thus.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. Examples include “these opportunity are very low,” “many of students,” and “students can earn and also provide his tuition fees,” where agreement, articles or pronoun forms are not controlled. The sentence “the government should must increase” also combines modal verbs incorrectly. Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, particularly around sentence boundaries. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, plural forms and modal constructions, then proofread each sentence for a complete and clear grammatical structure.

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