Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadsays people life generally much more stressfull than in the past , why people suffer more from stress nowadays , this essay will discuss some problem and suggest solution .
people live more stressfull it have a severals reason , first is expensive life style people life become more expensive , people have not more money for good life style , second is home bills they have not money for pay our home bills , students worride about there future if they fail there study and courses they donot grow and good profomance in there life , however people work full days and when the end of the day people fell tide or stressfull and donot have time for relax . for instance , A student think if they donot take our home work teacher punished hime and he fell more stressfull .
secondly , we discuss different solution , firstly people take excerise regularly and go morning wake they fell unstressfull and happy , people make shadule there daily life for example how start there day what eat in break fast and how spend our day , second thing is reduce work lode people do not work full day they select work hours in day since , if a men spend time our family they fell happy , active and unstressfull . In addition people make a shadule our daily life style .
In conclusion , people far for our future , how spend there difficult life so they have in stress . this essay discuss how people spend there life without stress .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to address the prompt provided. The task asks for a discussion on the increase in people continuing their education and the range of university courses available, requiring an opinion on whether this is a positive or negative development. Instead, the essay discusses the causes and solutions for general stress in life. Because the content is entirely off-topic and does not engage with the specific subject matter of higher education, it cannot be assessed as a successful response to the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the logical progression is severely hampered by the lack of relevance to the prompt. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'in conclusion', but they are often used mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is frequently unclear, and the flow of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended argument, especially since the argument itself is unrelated to the task instructions.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors (e.g., 'nowadsays', 'stressfull', 'severals', 'worride', 'profomance', 'excerise', 'shadule', 'lode') and incorrect word choices that frequently impede communication. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the student relies on basic, often misused, terminology. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning accurate spelling and expanding their range of topic-specific vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The grammatical control is weak throughout the essay. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, such as comma splices and run-on sentences. Subject-verb agreement is often incorrect (e.g., 'people life become', 'it have a severals reason'), and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and significantly impacts the clarity of the message.
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