Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Education has play own role in individual's life for achieving their goals. Some people continue their studies after passing out from schools due to which courses are increased on student's interest in universities and colleges. As it has a positive effect on individuals lives to become ambitious person.

Initially, people are more engaging in studies in a variety and because of it every colleges are implanting these curriculum into their courses. As in past, there were a minimal subjects and courses but now, subjects are more vast than previous. In a majority of students like to continue their studies not only to qualify job but also to make their self knowededgeable. Due to socialization, people are getting involved in many studies which they are not familiar but they find interested and put into their course. Many universities offers students scholarship, allows them to study more to get scholarships. For example, in many countries such as germany allow students to study for free or pay a low cost, which allow students to make admission in university without hesitating about the course fee.

Furthermore, universities and colleges allow students to take course according to their interest. This increasing number of students allows universities to develop their infrastructure and all the facilities for the students, by which students get attract towards the particular college or university. There should be many seperate or additional course except taking admission in full course. For example, if a person wants to to a particular subject which is main so rather to take enroll into full course can admit into one curriculum. It allow more people to take admission into the university.

To conclude with, increasing number of students are not only beneficials for university or college but also for the society because educated public can enhance the infracture of a country with their knowledge and ability to be progressive.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the increase in higher education and the range of courses available. You clearly state that this is a positive development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention the benefits of socialization and infrastructure, some points, such as the suggestion for 'additional courses' instead of full degrees, are slightly underdeveloped and could benefit from more specific examples or clearer logical links. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported argument that directly links back to why this trend is positive.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices like 'Initially', 'Furthermore', and 'To conclude with' to guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the connection between ideas is slightly disjointed, such as the transition between the mention of scholarships and the example of Germany. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, such as the use of 'these' and 'this' without a precise antecedent. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words will help the essay flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'ambitious', 'infrastructure', and 'progressive'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and non-standard collocations, such as 'passing out from schools', 'make their self knowededgeable', and 'get attract'. Some words are used incorrectly, such as 'implanting' instead of 'implementing' or 'infracture' (spelling error). To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word choices are contextually appropriate for an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Many universities offers', 'every colleges are implanting') and incorrect verb forms ('wants to to a particular subject'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are errors in sentence construction that occasionally make the meaning slightly difficult to follow. To achieve a higher score, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed with greater accuracy.

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