Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The education has key important factor for every individual however, nowadays individual has continuing their studies after schooling in many countries also many courses has increased in the universities and colleges. According to my point of view , After the schooling students have to go for further studies in universities for their betterment.
To begin with, In current situation Education is the most important thing in every individual's life. Without studying ,no matter how much you have skills? but it does not works. According to research conducted in France that, who's doing higher studies after complition of Higher secondary school's as a result Students had became more responsible; Capability to do anything in their life due to doing further studies in variety of field in universities. Moreover Pupils will become great person and develop their good personality with honesty and full of ethics.
On the other hand, Nowadays In my country many universities and colleges provide various type of courses and training program for the students. The students,who does not want to go abroad for studies they can studies here. In additional they can live with thier parents whereas they can take care of their parents and maintain the traditional culture.
The education and variety of courses increase in universities they may give more new opportunities and challenges to the students for their bright future so I have already said that I always positively attractive to new courses in the universities for students future betterment and I suggest to students they have to studies further for thier li
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a positive view on the increase in higher education opportunities. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention personal betterment and cultural preservation, the arguments lack depth and specific supporting evidence. The reference to 'research conducted in France' is vague and does not provide a clear example. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea supported by concrete examples or logical reasoning. The conclusion is incomplete, which affects the overall clarity of your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In additional' or 'According to my point of view'. There are also issues with referencing; for example, the transition between the importance of education and the availability of local courses is abrupt. The flow of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, making the progression of the argument feel disjointed at times. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. You rely on simple terms like 'important thing' and 'good personality'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'positively attractive' instead of 'positive about' and 'complition' (spelling error). While you attempt to use some academic vocabulary, the lack of precision and frequent errors in word formation limit your ability to convey ideas effectively. To reach a higher band, focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic terminology appropriate for an essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'many courses has increased' and 'students had became'. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary commas and missing spaces after punctuation marks. The range of sentence structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and correct verb tenses, before attempting more complex structures.
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