Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays the ratio of people towards higher education become increased also the of subjects taught at colleges and universities are higher in number. Its totally a positive approach.
To support the positive idea there are number of reasons behind this .To start with primary reason if people continues their higher education then the chances of crime and other illegal activities become low. People had more opportunities to get better and suitable jobs in future that secure their life. As teachers in Germany paid high as compared to other professions because they think teachers is a person who enables all people to fits in other professions. So after getting higher education there is a chance to become teacher that is a most respectable and highly paid profession.
If students move towards higher education then its understood thing colleges and universities also needs to increase their number of courses to overcome the rush. As if the available courses are limited in number then there are more competition and more rush. Universities and colleges also needs to increased the number of courses according to students interest, if any student interested in any subject they should be available to them rather than asking to opt other subject. Some people also go abroad for higher education for specialization in particular subject if the course in which they are interested are not available in their own country.
To pen down with such conclusion that there is a positive development that most of the people in different countries continues their education and become expert in any one field rather than staying free and looking to others for help. To provides varieties of courses in colleges and universities that meet the desire of students its a excellent approach.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the increase in higher education participation and the expansion of course offerings. You clearly state your position that this is a positive development. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding crime reduction is mentioned but not fully explained or supported with a logical link to higher education. Similarly, the example about teachers in Germany is slightly tangential and lacks a clear connection to the broader argument about the benefits of diverse university courses. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported idea that directly answers the 'why' behind your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To start with' and 'To pen down', to signal the structure. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural. Additionally, there are instances where the flow between sentences is disjointed, such as the transition between the discussion of crime and the example of teachers in Germany. Improving the use of referencing (e.g., using 'this' or 'these' to refer back to previous ideas) and varying your linking words would help the essay flow more smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'higher education', 'specialization', and 'professions'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'ratio of people towards higher education become increased' and 'its understood thing'. These errors occasionally make the text feel repetitive or imprecise. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding basic errors in word form, such as using 'increased' instead of 'increasing' or 'increase'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'colleges and universities also needs to increase') and verb tense consistency (e.g., 'if any student interested in any subject they should be available'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing commas and incorrect apostrophe usage. These errors are noticeable and occasionally require the reader to re-read a sentence to understand the intended meaning, which is characteristic of a band 5.5 performance.
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