Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argued that many countries these days the number of continuing their education after school has increased and the range of courses in colleges and universities has also increased. While some people believe this is the positive development. In my opinion this is the positive development.

In many countries the government helps in the education for students and they help in different ways like fully funded scholarship and need base scholapship thats why the number of people continuing our education. They participate in different activites and shows the interest. Thats why the universities or colleges increased the range of courses.

On the other hand, some countries people don't continuing their education because they don't have enough money. This is not a negative developnment because its helps me our life and future.

Some people believe that education is not important in our life but i think this is the most important in our life.

In my opinion this is the positive developnment because it helps our life. When i completed my intermediate , i continue my education . Then i completed my bacholer's degree. They support my life and secure my job. They help me my life and other activites.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 201 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state your position that the trend is positive, the arguments provided are underdeveloped and repetitive. For example, you mention government scholarships and personal experience, but these points lack the depth and specific examples required for a higher band. The response is also somewhat disjointed, as the paragraph regarding countries where people do not continue education is confusingly linked to the prompt. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for full task development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs are often missing or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'In my opinion' and 'That's why'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the third paragraph where the connection between financial difficulties and the positive nature of education is muddled. While there is a basic attempt at paragraphing, the lack of cohesive devices makes the flow of the argument feel mechanical and occasionally difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'however' would help connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'important', 'help', and 'increase' throughout the text. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'scholapship' instead of 'scholarship', 'activites' instead of 'activities', and 'developnment' instead of 'development'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas or demonstrate a higher level of language proficiency. To improve, you should focus on learning synonyms for common words and practicing the correct spelling of academic vocabulary. Incorporating more precise terminology related to education and societal trends would significantly enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people don't continuing'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'When i completed my intermediate, i continue my education'), and awkward sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence forms, which are necessary for higher band scores. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters and spacing. Focusing on basic sentence construction, correct verb tense usage, and proofreading for common errors would be a beneficial next step.

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