Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, there are many countries where the education provider has increased therefore, individuals continuing their education and school also upgrade their syllabus. I think this is positive development because they have chance to grab more knowledge and they can also unlock the new new skill through reading books.

First of all, people can easily collect many information about any subject which they are interested by reading books. When they get knowledge about the things which they read they have a idea about that things and they know about the how the things all work out, which can be helpful for them to tackle some serious condition with this knowledge. For example; a survey claim that, the person who have a reding habit is collected more knowledge than the person who do not read books in his daily life.

The second reason why I tell this is positive development is people can unlock the new skill through reading a books. People who are interested to learn a new skill they can be learn by reading .Additional, it helps to unlock the new skill and it gives a idea about the skill however, if people get perfection on that skill then they have to practice more in their daily basic. For example; most of the youngster are prefer to reading books than asking to the parents or other person for the new skill. Moreover, they also find out it helping a lot to unlock the new skill because in learning time you are facing all problems and find out the solution by yourself.

In conclusion, people choose to learning continue and all of the universities upgrade a courses which helps them to learning more which assist to put more information and upgrade a new skill on them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by arguing that the increase in higher education opportunities is a positive development. However, the development of ideas is limited. The essay focuses heavily on 'reading books' rather than the broader context of university and college courses mentioned in the prompt. While the position is clear, the supporting arguments are somewhat repetitive and lack depth, often relying on generalizations rather than specific, well-developed examples. To improve, you should focus more on the academic and professional implications of increased university access, such as career advancement or societal progress, rather than general reading habits.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Additional' instead of 'Additionally' and 'in his daily life' used awkwardly. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of smooth transitions between sentences. While the overall arrangement is coherent enough to follow, the logical flow is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, which makes the writing feel disjointed at times.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'unlock the new skill' and 'collect knowledge'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'daily basic' instead of 'daily basis' and 'a survey claim that' instead of 'a survey claims that'. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and synonyms to avoid repeating the same phrases throughout the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('a survey claim', 'youngster are prefer'), article usage ('a idea', 'a courses'), and word order. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the misuse of semicolons and commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors would significantly improve your score.

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