Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Recently in many nations the figure of individuals continuing their education after school rise also the range of available disciplines at universities and colloges increased. I do believe that it is a positive development for nations modernization acoss different sectors. With new technological adavnces demand for professional emplyees growing and that too with different skill sets so it is natural phenmenon.
Techology is adavancing at rapid pace. Opertaing these new technological tools required skilled professional who can understand the present technology, while laydown foundation for new adavancments in these fields. For example AI playing crucial role almost in every field from medical to social life. To understand this new technology required basic understaning while buliding on it requires even deeper knowldge of the field. Therefore both public and private sectors seeks for well qualified people. Hence more people are trying to achieve higher to get a good job with good pay.
Addtionally, as mentioned with new advancements in technology emerge to understaning that new courses or even disciplines are introduced. These new courses can prepare students to get the present knowlege of the field and bring new innovations. Therefore more courses are offered at higher level specefic for a field. WHich is a good development as it can produce new jobs oppertunities also can improve the society.
In conclusion, the rise in number of students in higher education as well as the brodening the range of courses offered also both are postive developments. These development will lead to new advancements in techology and eventually to modernization of the human society.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, clearly stating that the increase in higher education and course variety is a positive development. The ideas are relevant, focusing on technological advancement and job market demands. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, while you mention AI and the need for skilled professionals, the connection between the 'range of courses' and 'innovation' could be more deeply explored with more specific examples. The position is clear throughout, but the supporting arguments would benefit from more detailed elaboration to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the repetitive use of 'Therefore' and 'Hence' at the start of sentences. Referencing is occasionally unclear, for example, in the phrase 'as mentioned with new advancements', which lacks a clear antecedent. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and better referencing to create a smoother, more natural progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You attempt some topic-specific vocabulary like 'technological advances', 'modernization', and 'innovations'. However, there are frequent spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'colloges', 'adavances', 'emplyees', 'phenmenon', 'opertaning', 'laydown', 'understaning', 'buliding', 'knowldge', 'specefic', 'oppertunities', and 'brodening'. These errors are noticeable and detract from the overall quality of the writing. To improve, you should focus on proofreading your work to correct these basic spelling mistakes, as they limit your ability to demonstrate a wider, more precise range of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('the figure... rise', 'technology... required'), missing articles ('in almost every field'), and awkward phrasing ('the rise in number of students... as well as the brodening the range... also both are postive'). While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors suggests a lack of control over complex structures. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that articles are used correctly before nouns.
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