Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Now in many countries, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses were also increased in universities and colleges.

People continuing their education for secondary higher education and for universities after their higher education because people want to more educate and gain more knowledge. Therefore, it has a huge verity of different courses. There are many options for people in which field they want to study such as, computer science, accounting, engineering, and medical. The number of people increased because they know that the education is the only way of success. Moreover, the knowledge they were gain after completing their studies provides a lot of jobs opportunities and also they start their own business and applying their skills and information in their business to grow and making them success.

Moreover, people choose the courses according to their interest. When people become more educate and do their jobs or run their own businesses that was the great positive affect on our country economy and when people was educated they were represent our country and it was a proud moment for us.

In conclusion, although many people should continuing their studies after education was good for their own future. I believe education is most important to make life better not only this its build your character and improve your knowledge and make strong your own abilities. It was a positive development that people in many continuing their education for achieving their goals and become a successful person.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by identifying the trend as a positive development. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention economic benefits and personal growth, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. The essay tends to repeat the same points (e.g., 'people want to educate' and 'jobs opportunities') rather than extending them. To improve, you should provide a concrete example of how a specific course or field of study has positively impacted a country's economy. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments need more substance to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'not only this its build your character' is grammatically and cohesively awkward. Transitions like 'Moreover' are used, but the logical flow between sentences is sometimes disrupted by grammatical errors. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'when people was educated they were represent our country', where the connection between the clauses is weak. Improving the variety and precision of linking words would enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. You frequently use words like 'people', 'education', and 'study' without much variation. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'huge verity' (instead of 'variety'), 'more educate' (instead of 'better educated'), and 'great positive affect' (should be 'effect'). These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly unclear. To improve, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, such as 'higher education institutions' instead of 'universities and colleges' or 'economic prosperity' instead of 'country economy'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Examples include 'the range of courses were also increased', 'the knowledge they were gain', and 'when people was educated they were represent'. These errors are persistent and sometimes impede the reader's understanding. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on consistent verb tense usage and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree. Practising complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or conditional sentences, will also help.

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