Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
It has been observed that a lot of people have more awareness towards education after completion of schooling is surged due to wide variety of courses are providing by educational institution and universities .There are several worthwhile and downsides of too much availability of different classes. To a larger extent, I belive that this is beneficial development. My justification will be explained in ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, the capital one is that it is accessible and convenient for all the students who wants to pursue their higher education in their nearby area. For example, sometimes students face many problem due to lack of colleges in their village and suburbs. So they are leaving education because of transportation and also less courses availability. In addition, It reduces the relocation of learners from their hometown to other city. They are enjoying their life and study in their city.
Add fuel to this discussion, it will enhance the awareness of education and their uses in real life world. Disciples can utilise their maximum time in study rather than commuting time. Additionally, it reduces the air pollution and save fossil fuels. Another one is that it reflects the country's education in abroad countries. This leads to NRI students also get addmission in universities. It boosts economy of country and represent country identity.
On contrary, it is increasing the competition between colleges that also produce confusion for selecting best college.
By agglomerating aforementioned facts, it can be concluded that this development is providing more advantages instead of detrimental effects. It is useful for students regarding education and also ecofriendly option. I believe that " colleges are not providing just education also make children very responsible and discipline citizens".
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that the increase in higher education opportunities is a positive development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While you provide reasons such as accessibility and economic benefits, some points are under-developed or lack logical depth, such as the claim about 'NRI students' or the link between college competition and confusion. The essay covers all parts of the task, but the arguments could be more effectively supported with more specific examples or clearer logical links to the main thesis. To reach a higher band, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-explained idea that directly supports your overall stance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Add fuel to this discussion' or 'By agglomerating aforementioned facts'. These phrases do not always fit the context smoothly. Additionally, the progression of ideas within paragraphs is occasionally disjointed; for instance, the transition from local accessibility to global economic impact in the second body paragraph is abrupt. Improving the variety and precision of linking words will help the flow of your writing appear more natural and logical.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, but there are frequent inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'capital one' is used incorrectly to mean 'main point', and 'disciples' is an inappropriate term for 'students'. Phrases like 'awareness towards education... is surged' and 'providing by educational institution' show a lack of control over grammatical collocations. While your meaning is generally clear, these errors prevent the vocabulary from being considered flexible or precise. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using more academic terminology accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('courses are providing by'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing ('it reflects the country's education in abroad countries'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around periods and commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically passive voice and article usage, before attempting more complex structures.
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