Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In my opinion, in the era of world everyone wanted to get a better education.People get education for better future and If they get better education they get no difficulties in future to spend life.The world become more modern and the range of courses also increases and it is the era of artificial intelligence.The most of people move to computer field rather than medical field
In this new era everyone wanted better education, everyone have some dreams and everyone wanted to success in future and his parents feel proud his son or daughter.Everyone has some dreams to fulfill his dreams they need to study with focus and get a admission in a better university stay consistent and trust on Allah, and pray to Allah for better future
It is right the courses in university is increased and the old trend like to become doctor or an engineer.In this era everyone knows which course is best for the future and then they go to this field.In my opinion the increases of course is best things the people should also know the world is not dependent on the doctor or an engineer there is many field in this world.In this new era some people wanted to become chartered accountants which is the best field to get job easily all over the world
In conclusion,the increases of courses is a positive thing and everyone wanted a better education and if you study with full hardwork and one day you become a successful person
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by identifying the trend as a positive development. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While you mention that the range of courses is beneficial, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. For instance, you mention 'artificial intelligence' and 'chartered accountants' but do not explain how these specific fields contribute to the broader societal benefits of higher education. The essay relies heavily on general statements about 'dreams' and 'success' rather than providing a structured analysis of why this trend is positive. To improve, focus on providing clear, distinct reasons (e.g., economic growth, personal development) and supporting them with logical explanations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression within them is weak. Ideas are often presented in a disjointed manner, and the transition between sentences is frequently abrupt. There is a lack of cohesive devices; you rely on simple sentence structures and repetitive phrasing (e.g., 'In this new era', 'everyone wanted') rather than using linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in contrast'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. Improving the use of transition signals would significantly enhance the clarity of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. You frequently use simple words like 'better', 'good', and 'things'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'get a admission' (should be 'gain admission') and 'the increases of course is best things' (should be 'the increase in the variety of courses is a positive development'). To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate a wider range of academic vocabulary and demonstrate more precise control over word forms and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'everyone wanted' instead of 'everyone wants', 'the range of courses also increases' instead of 'has increased'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain run-on structures. There is a lack of complex sentence forms, which are necessary for higher band scores. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences.
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