Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In Several Regions, the number of individuals carry on their studies after intermediate has make a incline jumb. Also many subjetcs that teach in the intermediate level and in universities increased.
In my perspective, this is the positive impact in the development of the educational institutes that they have a wider range of courses and having a great number of opportunities for the students.
The main points is that individuals having fond of studies than they have to continue their studies after the low standard. Their decision increase the number of departments, courses and also some kind of degrees. After having the great knowlegde. they have many kind of opportunities in their practical field. For example the increase of specialized doctors, medicine, phycologists, engerieers and lawyers. Furthermore, students securing a great salary job, high ranked scale, protocol in their practical field.
Moreover, the increase of subjects in the educational institues have massive advantages. In past, Students have limited things for learning and developing a new skill. While, students allow to chose if they have the variety of subjects like game development, artifical intelligence, political science and also great opportunity in the bussiness administration.Furthermore, universities make the high revenue from the fee of the students. It increase the competion of educational organizations that benefical for students to chose the correct place.
In the conclusion, i discussed the both view and my prespctive is that it the positive development for gain the knowledge of students from various kind of courses. As far as i am concerned that, wider way of opportutities may increase the interest of populations, securing the right job with the huge amount of practical skill.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing whether the increase in further education and university courses is a positive or negative development, leaning towards it being positive. However, the development of ideas is limited and sometimes unclear due to expression issues. For instance, the writer mentions that individuals having a fondness for studies leads to the expansion of departments and specialized professions like 'doctors, medicine, phycologists, engerieers and lawyers', but these points are underdeveloped and lack strong supporting examples. The position is stated but remains somewhat simplistic throughout the essay. The task is addressed partially, corresponding to a Band 5 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, featuring a distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is disjointed, and the relationships between ideas are often unclear. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'In the conclusion, i discussed the both view'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph cohesion is weak, with sentences frequently lacking smooth logical transitions. Referencing is also imprecise at times, making it difficult to follow the flow of argument consistently. This aligns with Band 5 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'artificial intelligence', 'political science', and 'specialized', but these are offset by frequent word choice errors and incorrect collocations, such as 'has make a incline jumb', 'having fond of studies', 'great knowlegde', and 'high revenue from the fee'. Spelling errors are also present, including 'subjetcs', 'phycologists', 'engerieers', 'institues', 'bussiness', and 'prespctive'. These vocabulary limitations and frequent inaccuracies sometimes cause strain for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in basic sentence construction, verb tenses, and agreements, such as 'the number of individuals carry on', 'many subjetcs that teach', 'this is the positive impact', and 'students allow to chose'. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, with lowercase letters used for pronouns like 'i' and mismanaged commas. Because complex structures are frequently faulty and errors are persistent throughout the text, the response meets the criteria for Band 4.5, which is rounded to 5.0.
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