Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, in many countries thes days the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased. i think it ispositive and good but highly increased have many benifit and some disadvantages like not good propare education and any universities to give degree to give student wit out study.

one of the most important positive thinking is many student easily gain education low cost and many thing easily achive.low cost because the trasportation cost, liveing expenditise and many things are easily availabele. other benifits is the student study with her/his family and no feel alone. they easily manage the time and those thing easily achive. no feel denger and he strongly focus the study and good score in there examination. for exaple, one student have exam in 6 months later but he cann't be manage the time this time help the family members.

on the hand benifit as well as some disadavantages in increased in universities and school in our socitey because the some universities hive the certificate with out study is student. no any skills and regular basic of education to give certificate and student graduated. this type of disadvantage are mainly phase the student and parents. student was graduated but he had no skill and no any study materials no gain any think of study. this kinf of behevier to harm of the student life. i.e. no increased the universities and school out of need .

In conclusion, people this think to achieve the knowledge gain in our parents and student.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of increased access to higher education and courses. The writer attempts to present a position, suggesting that while education becomes more accessible and cost-effective, there are significant drawbacks regarding substandard institutions providing unearned certificates. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times repetitive, touching on concepts like transport costs, living expenditures, and fraudulent institutions without fully extending them with specific examples. The reasoning is frequently obscured by unclear phrasing and abrupt shifts in focus, particularly in the third paragraph. While all parts of the task are addressed, the overall development remains somewhat basic and under-developed, aligning closely with Band 5 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays some organizational structure, dividing ideas into introductory, supportive, counter-argument, and concluding sections. However, there is a clear lack of smooth overall progression and logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Cohesive devices are either inadequate, inaccurate, or overused, such as repetitive transitions like 'other benifits is' and 'on the hand'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is frequently disrupted by fragmented thoughts and run-on sentences. Referencing is also confusing at times, making it difficult to follow the logical links between ideas. These features place the response firmly at Band 4.5 to 5.0, with Band 5 best reflecting the level of cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, utilizing everyday terms such as 'good', 'many', 'things', and 'study'. There are frequent word-choice errors and spelling mistakes throughout the text, including 'thes days', 'benifit', 'propare', 'liveing expenditise', 'denger', 'socitey', and 'behevier'. The student attempts less common vocabulary, such as 'expenditise' and 'certificates', but these are marred by severe inaccuracies in form and spelling. The lexical range is limited and frequently strains the reader's understanding, reflecting the criteria for a Band 4.0 performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex forms. There are pervasive grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the number of people... have', 'student study'), incorrect verb tenses ('he cann't be manage'), and missing auxiliary verbs or prepositions. Punctuation is also poorly handled, with lowercase letters starting sentences and incomplete terminal punctuation. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and frequently distort the intended meaning, which corresponds directly to the Band 4 descriptors.

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