Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, with the growth of the humen population, the number of students that they followed their studies after school increased. Thus, the amount of courses at the universities also climed. I strongly believe this will affect the development in the negative sense because it will impact badly on the job requirement and it will make students work much more than it required.

The main reason why I think its negative development is because it will make the job requirement much harder, with the growth of proportion of graduant students university degrees will lose its value as where the majority is having a degree. Furthermore, companies eventually will require more skills for the students, for instance, today if a recent graduent wants to apply for a job he must have several additional skills with his degree, however, 10 years before individuals get hired just by earning a certant degree.

Another crucial factor is work requirement, companies are lately using their empolyees as a slaves, they get lower salaries for hard tasks and long hours and sadly the worker is obliged to do it because if he complains or argue with their bosses they will end up losing their jobs, and this contributes to the huge amount of umployeed,thus the marker is too full. As a result, graduants end up being treated badly and they have choose.

In conclusion, In many countries nowadays, the proportion of individual following their education after school had significantly increased as the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also climb, There

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear negative position on the increasing number of people pursuing higher education and the expanding range of courses. The writer attempts to support this viewpoint with arguments regarding job market competition and employment conditions. However, the development of these ideas remains somewhat limited and underdeveloped. For instance, the claim that university degrees lose their value is introduced but not fully explored with sufficient depth. Furthermore, the final sentence of the response cuts off abruptly, leaving the conclusion incomplete. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, placing the performance in the Band 5 range according to the official descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays an attempt at logical organisation, dividing the content into an introduction, body paragraphs, and an incomplete conclusion. However, the overall progression is disrupted by mechanical and faulty cohesive devices, such as 'Thus, the amount of courses' and 'Furthermore, companies eventually'. Additionally, referencing is frequently unclear, as seen in the phrase 'the number of students that they followed'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the abrupt termination of the final paragraph highlights a lack of control over structural flow. These issues result in a performance that best fits the Band 5 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and contains numerous noticeable errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples of these inaccuracies include 'humen' instead of human, 'climed' instead of climbed, 'graduant' instead of graduate, 'empolyees' instead of employees, 'umployeed' instead of unemployed, and 'marker' instead of market. While the writer attempts to use some less common items such as 'proportion' and 'obligation', the persistent spelling and lexical errors restrict the range to a level that minimally satisfies the criteria for Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay demonstrates a very limited range of structures, with frequent grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text. Examples of faulty structures and errors include 'the number of students that they followed their studies', 'universities degrees will lose its value as where the majority is having', and 'they have choose'. Complex sentence forms are attempted, but they are frequently inaccurate and prone to severe syntactic slips. Punctuation is also neglected in places, and the unfinished concluding sentence further weakens grammatical control. These recurring errors match the characteristics of Band 4.

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