Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Education has significant importance in our life.It not only help us in our life but also polish our character in the society by which we are able to face the problem occured in our personal life.It create immense recognition of personality just because of having knowledge.In the present time in many countries the number of student studying has increased. Additionally the courses offered in the university and colleges has raised the number of choices.

Firstly, the pros of having these development.It encourages the students to studying their desirable subjects in the high school. They really enjoyed their stay at colleges and universities. Furthermore,It helped them to gained advance knowledge of that particular subject which helped them in the future.Offering more subjects also encourges professor as their is more demand of the teachers in the country leading to more employment.The litracy rate of the country also hike as every one in the country is studying.

However, the cons of continuing education after school and increase in the range of courses offered in the colleges and univeristies will leads to lesser people for the work at early age leading to lower labour.Additionally there is chance of shortage of labour in the country as every young student is studying.Due to rise in litracy rate government needs to spend more on it by which there is dramatically rise in taxes to collect more for this.This all scenerio leads to higher inflation in the society.Furthermore, Higher education is expensive and cannot afford by all the people this will make differenciation between the people as elite class can bear the high fees.

In conclusion to this, i would say that this development has more positive impacts than negative as educated people will be successful in the future due to their expertise and make difference in the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative developments associated with increased higher education options. A clear position is stated in the conclusion, arguing that the developments are overall positive. Ideas are introduced throughout the body paragraphs, but they remain relatively under-developed and lack specific examples to substantiate claims. For instance, the discussion on labour shortages and increased taxes touches upon valid socioeconomic points, but these arguments are presented broadly without substantial elaboration. To reach a higher band, the student should expand upon each idea with concrete examples, illustrations, or deeper causal explanations rather than moving quickly from one point to another. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, fulfilling the basic requirements of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a recognisable introduction, body paragraphs tackling pros and cons, and a concluding statement. Paragraphing is utilised to group ideas logically, separating the positive aspects from the negative ones. However, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or awkwardly deployed, such as "Firstly, the pros of having these development" or "In conclusion to this". Furthermore, referencing is occasionally unclear, and logical progression between sentences can feel disjointed due to abrupt shifts in ideas. The management of cohesive links requires a more natural flow and greater variety of transition words to enhance the overall readability and internal cohesion of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, demonstrating an attempt to discuss education and its economic impacts using terms like "employment," "literacy rate," "inflation," and "elite class." However, there are notable limitations and frequent inaccuracies in word choice, spelling, and collocation. Examples include "occured" (occurred), "studied" instead of studying, "hike" used as a verb where 'rise' or 'increase' is required, "scenerio" (scenario), and "differenciation" (differentiation). These lexical errors and awkward formations occasionally detract from the reading experience, placing this response firmly in the Band 5 category for lexical resource due to the noticeable frequency of vocabulary limitations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but the grammatical accuracy is hindered by frequent errors in punctuation, subject-verb agreement, and tense consistency. Examples of errors include "It not only help us" (helps), "the courses offered... has raised" (have raised), "encourges professor as their is more demand" (encourages professors as there is), and "cannot afford by all the people" (cannot be afforded). Punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods and commas, are also pervasive throughout the text. While the meaning remains mostly clear despite these issues, the high density of structural errors prevents the response from achieving a higher band score.

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