Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Education plays an important role in the devolpment of any natoin. Nowadays, many people are continuing their education after school and the number of courses in universities and collages has also increases. In my opinion, I strongly believe that it is a positive devolpment.Now, I will explain the facts that why I like this.

The every first advantage of getting more education is the increment to our knowledge and a boost to our countrys economy because today is an age of science. and there is a tough competition in every field of life and science.for any job, we ned to get higher degree. for example, if a company need any employee, then they will raise an ad on internet and after seeing this ad many people will come. if there are two applicants for this job. Ones degree is intermediate and others degree is matric. so, the company will choose the one who had the intermediate degree because they know that this man had more skills then the other who had a matric degree and he will also helps there company to rise.

The second main advantage is studying abroad. If a person wants to study abroad, he has to complete his intermediate to apply for a university. greater number of marks means more chances to apply for a good university and he will also apply for an online job by sending them the details about his degree.

Overall, it helps us to create more chance

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by expressing a clear position that the increase in post-school education and course availability is a positive development. However, the task achievement is hindered significantly by two main factors. First, the essay falls short of the minimum length requirement, containing only 246 words instead of the mandated 250 words, which warrants a penalty under the length check rules. Second, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on employment relies on a simplistic hypothetical example comparing intermediate and matric degrees, and the second body paragraph shifts abruptly to studying abroad without fully connecting it back to the core premise of increased course availability. While a position is presented, the extension and support of ideas remain basic and underdeveloped, aligning the response with Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays some organizational structure with distinct paragraphs, but it lacks a clear overall progression. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs feel abrupt and mechanical, such as 'Now, I will explain the facts that why I like this' and 'The every first advantage'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph is incomplete and abrupt, consisting of a single unfinished sentence ('Overall, it helps us to create more chance'). Furthermore, cohesive devices are often inaccurate or misused, leading to a choppy reading experience. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical flow of arguments. These features are characteristic of Band 5, where organisation is present but overall progression and cohesion are poorly managed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple terms, such as 'good', 'job', 'company', and 'education'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'devolpment', 'natoin', 'collages', 'increases', and 'ned'. Word choice and collocation are frequently awkward or incorrect, for example, 'increment to our knowledge', 'raise an ad', and 'helps there company'. While the intended meaning is usually retrievable despite these flaws, the range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The frequent errors in spelling and word choice place this performance firmly at Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical range is limited, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic coordinating conjunctions. When the writer attempts more complex structures, they are often faulty or poorly punctuated, as seen in run-on sentences and sentence fragments like 'science. and there is a tough competition in every field of life and science.for any job, we ned to get higher degree.' Punctuation is frequently neglected or misapplied, such as lowercase letters at the beginning of sentences following periods and missing apostrophes in possessives like 'countrys'. Frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and sentence boundaries, cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect the descriptors for Band 5.

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