Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Education is the key of success.It leads a success.In many nations nowadays the number of people continuing their education after school has increased and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.In my opinion it is a beneficial development rather than negative development because unlimited courses helps student to achieve their goals.
firstly; Increasing the courses is beneficial for the students. Their is no worries about the courses in the education system.In additional students also study their own choicable future carrer course which helps them to rise up.For eg; In nepal their is no chance to study Early childhood education, Social worker.Therefore; Most of the nepalese students prefer Australia for the different varieties of courses.
On the another hand; Increasing the courses affect on the competition of works because if many courses are available then there are less prople who works im the same field then the market competitions steadily decreased. For eg ; In the south korea there is a limited courses which affect students to worked in a new field and new sources.Tf we try our best im the different path of course we learn knowledge about New trends and get a opportunities. It affect in the minding capacity also.
Therefore; different courses shows different path to build a string career platform. In my opinion it concluded the positive aspect in the government and helps to create a new ideas and view in the human also discover the opportunities for yhe human beings also
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task only partially and presents a position that is somewhat difficult to follow. While the writer expresses a clear view that the increase in courses is a positive development, the ideas are limited and under-developed. For example, the argument regarding students studying their own choices is supported with a brief mention of studying Early childhood education or Social worker in Nepal, but this point lacks sufficient elaboration. Similarly, the counterargument attempting to discuss market competition and trends in South Korea is confused and unclear. To move to a higher level, the writer needs to extend and support all ideas more fully with relevant examples and explanations rather than jumping abruptly between different thoughts.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some organisation evident in the essay, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, featuring abrupt transitions such as 'firstly;' and 'Therefore;' which are used inaccurately. Cohesive devices are frequently faulty or over-used, and referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the body paragraphs where sentences feel disconnected. To achieve a higher score, the writer must ensure logical sequencing throughout the essay, using cohesive devices naturally and ensuring each paragraph has a clear central topic supported by relevant, smoothly linked details.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey the basic message. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary items, such as 'beneficial development' and 'market competitions', but these are accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice, form, and collocation, such as 'choicable future carrer' and 'minding capacity'. Spelling mistakes also occur, which causes some difficulty for the reader. To improve this criterion, the writer should expand their vocabulary range and focus on accurate word forms, collocations, and correct spelling to ensure precise expression without impeding communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writer demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex forms that are often faulty. There are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'unlimited courses helps'), articles (e.g., 'in the south korea'), plurals, and prepositional usage. Punctuation errors are also prominent, such as misplaced semicolons and missing spaces after periods. To reach higher bands, the writer needs to increase the variety of sentence structures used and improve overall accuracy by reducing basic grammatical errors and mastering punctuation rules.
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