Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowdays, in many countries the number of individuals rose in terms of persuing their learning after school, and the variety of courses provided by universities and colleges has also grew. In my persepective, it is such a great positive development people now have a lot of options to choose for their career.

First, one advantage of continuing higher education leads to the development and progress of a country. For instance, if seniors continue their further learning after school they can become good professionals such as, doctors, engineers and scientists, which will do great inventions for their country in the future.In addition, they can find out the treatment of different deadly diseases , they can build extraordinary buildings and also they can explore the mysterious things about our universe. To be more, people will participate in a great ratio.

Moreover, availabilty of variety of courses provides a great flexibilty to study different feilds. For example, if a person is interested at zoology and he cannot find a course related to his interest he cannot study furthermore in that subject. Similarly, if someone is keen to study english litrature and the subject is available to him in his college or university he will do great with that.

In conclusion, as far as I am concerned, people will take more interest if they easily find their related field, otherwise they will left their education thatswhy i think it

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear positive view, stating that more educational choices help people select a career and contribute to national progress. The examples of doctors, engineers, scientists, and disease treatment are relevant to the topic. However, the response addresses the issue only partially: the benefits are asserted more than explained, and the point about course variety is illustrated mainly through hypothetical cases rather than developed consequences. The final sentence is incomplete, so the conclusion does not fully restate or consolidate your position. The response also falls 15 words short of the required minimum. To strengthen the answer, explain how wider access to courses benefits individuals and society, develop each example, and finish with a complete conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a concluding attempt. Paragraphs generally group related points, and signposts such as “First,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help show the intended sequence. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from professional development to inventions, diseases, buildings, and participation without explaining the links between these ideas. Some connections are mechanical or imprecise, such as “To be more,” and the zoology example is difficult to follow because its conditional reasoning is repeated. The unfinished final sentence also disrupts the overall ending. Use clearer links between claim, explanation, and example, and ensure each paragraph develops one central point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “higher education,” “professionals,” “treatment,” “variety of courses,” and “related field.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main positive argument. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, sometimes making the reader pause: “persuing,” “persepective,” “availabilty,” and “litrature.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “participate in a great ratio” and “do great with that.” Aim for more precise academic phrasing and check spelling carefully. For example, describe students as “enrolling in further education,” and say that they can “make a significant contribution” rather than “do great.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if a person is interested … he cannot find a course.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors affect clarity. Examples include “the number of individuals rose” alongside “has also grew,” the missing structure in “one advantage … leads,” and “otherwise they will left their education.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “such a great positive development people now have” and the run-on transition before “In addition.” The final sentence is incomplete. Practise accurate verb forms and conditional patterns, and use full stops to separate complete ideas before adding more complex structures.

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