Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, in some countries number of individuals persue their education system after completion school level has gradually rise and varities of cources are also available at the university and college level are also increased. According to my stand point is that it is a positive development because persons gain vast quantity of knowledge about any perticular subjects.

On the one hand, there are several reasons that i choose a positive development. Firstly, the biggest benifit is that persons gain better job apportunities in the future. Moreover, gain knowledge about science to secure their future and also enhance the ability of childrens life. Secondly, in the society technology is boost for well educated peoples and economy growth are also grametically increase. For instance, a well educated society have more reliable apportunities and also have major effects on human lives. Furthermore, life become much easier in the presence of variety of devices and range of social media apps. Finally, individuals avail all the opportunities than can be achieved in the persence of knowledge.

On the other hand, there are also some challenges that have faced by the young generations just like youngsters familiy do not have much facilities to to achieve new goals and get more knowledge in the higher level of education system. For examples, at the colleges and the universities level. In addition, some persons do not have much memory to store abundant of of education meterial this one is also a lack of memory store.

In conclusion, although variety of individuals that continue the study of after after there higher level education, individulas face challenges and drawbacks but it should be a positive develeopment for rapidly advancing world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear in the introduction and conclusion: you consider the growth in further education and course choice a positive development. You also attempt to acknowledge a drawback, such as unequal access for families with limited resources. However, the response only partly develops the task. Most supporting points are broad—for example, education leads to better jobs and technology helps society—without explaining how the wider range of courses specifically benefits people. The point about memory and storing educational material is unclear and not convincingly connected to the question. To strengthen the response, explain a few relevant ideas in more depth and support them with a specific example, while making the relationship between course choice and your argument explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting positive and negative points, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and several ideas are placed next to one another without a clear link. For instance, the discussion moves from job opportunities to children’s lives, economic growth, devices, and social media without explaining the connections. Some linking phrases are also awkward or repetitive, and the final paragraph repeats the position without clearly summarising the main reasons. Group related points and use referencing and transitions to show how each sentence develops the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to education and society, including “job opportunities,” “well educated society,” “economy growth,” and “variety of devices.” This gives you some means of expressing the topic, but the range is limited and errors in spelling, word choice, and collocation are noticeable. Examples include “persue,” “varities,” “cources,” “grametically increase,” and “memory store”; some make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “gain vast quantity of knowledge” and “life become much easier in the presence of” are also unnatural in context. Build accuracy by learning common word partnerships and checking spelling and word forms. Prefer precise expressions such as “a wider choice of degree programmes” and “economic growth.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including a contrast introduced by “although” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, the range is limited, and complex attempts are often faulty. For example, “number of individuals … has gradually rise” has problems with the article and verb form, while “a well educated society have” has subject–verb disagreement. The sentence beginning “Moreover, gain knowledge…” lacks a clear subject, and “there are also some challenges that have faced by the young generations” has an incorrect passive construction. These errors recur and sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking agreement, verb forms, articles, and punctuation.

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