Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

its very good indicative from universities because every person have their own interests to study and if they found lot of new courses its very good for them to go according to their interest and also its really good over all for country to develop in future e.g they found really different type of new staff or business after the passing of university new courses then they will manage they new works from according the field as i did bechlors in computer science i learn lot of things according to my field first of all i learn how to go better from some one who was already stuck in somwhere and how to help them to if i could do i will definitely help them also my university professors supports me from my learning and speaking skill to understand better and better then am really glad to have them in my university life if universities provide new course's its very benefical for them also most of the people's came they from foreign and apply their as well

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a generally positive position, saying that more courses let people follow their interests and can help a country develop. Your computer-science experience also gives the response a relevant personal example. However, the task is addressed only partially: the ideas are brief and not sufficiently explained, and the final point about international students is unfinished. The response also contains 177 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough space to develop the argument or support it with clear examples. To strengthen the response, explain how course choice benefits students and society, add a specific example, and address any possible disadvantages before reaching a clear conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a recognisable overall direction: you begin with the benefits of course choice, then give a personal example, and return to the value of universities offering new courses. However, the response is presented as one long sequence rather than organised paragraphs, and ideas run together without clear progression. Connectors such as “and,” “also,” and “then” are repeated, while the relationship between your learning experience and the country’s development is not made explicit. The final phrase about people coming from abroad is difficult to follow and does not complete the point. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one main idea with clear links.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “interests,” “courses,” “university,” “field,” and “professors,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is basic and several phrases are inaccurate or unclear, such as “very good indicative,” “new staff or business,” and “manage they new works.” Spelling and word-form problems, including “bechlors” and “benefical,” also reduce precision. Aim for more exact academic expressions and check spelling and collocations. For example, you could describe courses as “a wider range of programmes,” say they help students “pursue their interests,” and explain that graduates can “contribute to economic development.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, and the reader can identify your main positive view. However, sentence structures are very limited and many sentences contain errors that make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “every person have,” “if they found lot of new courses,” and “they will manage they new works”; these show problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and pronouns. Punctuation is also largely absent, so the long sequence is difficult to read. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because” and “which.” Check agreement, articles, and pronouns, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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