Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Education is important for every human it plays a vital role in any professional life. In recent years, Students continue their studies after schooling for higher Education which in my view is a very positive change in the world.

Now, there are plenty of career options for students to persue in there lives.Globally many universities offering alot of different couses for Masters and Phd studies which enables the people to polish there skill on the other level.

Many people think it is just a waste of time and money and one can start his career after schooling and start earning ahead to thoes who keep studing further, and also have more experience in real life, I don't think tis is true because those who just had a basic schooling they have no speciality in there skill they also have to work in different areas to develop any skill. Moreover people who go for higher studies have determine there goal in one feild and study it thoroughly and become a specialisit of there own feild, thoes people are on high demand in Market.

In my experience im a Medical student, Doctors who only complete there initial studies and start working earn less. However theres a plenty of options for a Doctor to become Master in one feild, An individual can never excel in every feild, Higher Education with diversity of courses help many doctors like me to expert in one feild, like i choose Sport Medicine for my specialisation which helps me to work specifically in the feild of my choice.

Taking everything into account, it is very crucial in these days for every student to continue their education after school, and should polish there skill in one specific feild according to the need of World.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you consider the growth in further education and course choice a positive development, and you maintain this view in the conclusion. You give relevant reasons, including specialisation, career prospects and your experience as a medical student choosing sports medicine. The comparison with people who begin work after school also addresses a possible opposing view. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained: for example, the claim that specialists are “on high demand in Market” would be stronger with a specific example or explanation of how course choice meets changing employment needs. The discussion focuses more on further study than on the increased range of courses, so the two aspects of the prompt are not developed equally. Develop both with clearer supporting detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on course and career options, a counterargument, a personal example, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “Taking everything into account” help signal relationships between ideas. At times, though, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several claims are joined into long sentences, particularly in the paragraph beginning “Many people think it is just a waste of time and money.” The shift from general claims to the medical example is relevant but could be signposted more clearly. Some references, such as “those people,” are not fully precise. Use shorter units to separate claims and explanations, and make each paragraph’s main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to education and employment, including “career options,” “higher studies,” “specialisation,” and “professional life,” and you attempt more specific terms such as “Sport Medicine.” This gives you enough range to communicate your main ideas, although several choices and spelling errors reduce precision and naturalness. Examples include “polish there skill,” “expert in one feild,” and “on high demand in Market”; these make some phrases awkward or unclear. Repetition of “field” and “higher studies” also limits flexibility. Work on accurate spelling and common academic collocations, and choose precise terms for the benefits of further education. Proofreading would help distinguish “their” from “there” and correct forms such as “specialist.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “because” and a relative clause in “which helps me to work specifically.” The main message remains understandable, but control is uneven: some sentences contain several clauses without clear punctuation, as in “Many people think it is just a waste of time and money and one can start his career…” This makes relationships between ideas harder to follow. There are also errors in sentence boundaries and grammatical forms, for example, “Education is important for every human it plays…” and “many universities offering…” Articles, agreement and verb forms need more consistent control. Practise separating independent clauses and checking each sentence for a complete subject and verb; this will make your varied structures clearer and more accurate.

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