Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries majority number of people continue there education after school because they think education important for living better live and having respect in today era because people respect the educated man.on other hand same people think study after school is not much important . they think school education is enough for living a life inaddtion they think work start at early age is more important then study. for example people thought if they complete their they get high income job and then they give better life to their family furthmore he thinks that he can give his children a good life and a good education. in my family my father study in medical and become a doctor and provide me a good education and life.

they also serve they poor people. so it is good to complte their education.

furthermore, it is very good the range of courses available at university and collage has also increased with time inaddtion it also important to update our education system its provide us different oppournities.

form my prospective it is postive development to update courses of education in college and university with the passage of time. it provide different oppournities for student . student study their course accordding to his interset and achive their dream with happiness

so, groverment should try to make education better ii is very helpful for country and for country people .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that expanding university and college courses is positive, and the example of your father becoming a doctor helps connect education with family wellbeing and service to others. However, the response only partially addresses the question: the discussion of people who believe school education is enough is not clearly linked to your own evaluation, and the benefits of a wider range of courses are asserted rather than explained. The ideas about opportunities and pursuing interests need specific development, such as explaining how course choice can match labour-market needs. The response is also 15 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop and support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the response moves from reasons for continuing education to the growth in course choice and then to a concluding opinion. Basic linking expressions such as “on the other hand,” “furthermore” and “so” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because several points are crowded into one paragraph, and the contrast introduced by “on the other hand” is not clearly resolved. The sentence about your father, for example, shifts abruptly to serving poor people. Some connectors are repeated or used where the relationship between ideas is unclear. Use separate paragraphs for contrasting views, your supporting reasons and your conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “education system,” “opportunities,” “income” and “courses,” and the reader can generally identify your main message. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “good,” “education” and “life.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “collage” for “college,” “prospective” where “perspective” is intended, and “complete their education” where the reference is unclear. These errors sometimes make the meaning harder to follow. Build a wider set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for example, explain how course choice can improve employment prospects rather than relying on general claims about a “good life.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “because” and “if,” but most sentence patterns are simple or become difficult to control when several ideas are joined. Frequent errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation can make the reader pause: “people respect the educated man.on other hand” lacks appropriate sentence separation, while “it provide different oppournities” has an agreement error. The opening also contains incomplete or unclear grammatical relationships. Practise writing accurate simple sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, use full stops consistently, and review singular/plural agreement and articles before submitting.

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