Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays in worldwide, there is a significant number of students are increasing day by day who are persuing there studies after there schooling. and in result courses, univerties and colleges are increasing rapidly.

According to my observation this have a very positive impact in development of society. in that senario this will be the one of the main reason in decreasing of Crimes in society if students make there self busy in study and dont waste there time in other irrelevent activties Like spending alot of time on social media, playing indoor games on play station and learn some bad habbits and make there self lazzy and useless Ibnstead iof this they will became a very independent child and secure there future by doing a hard work in there studiy and necame a professional in filed in which they want to work.

as per my preception, This thing leads us to haev a good motivation and big examples for our generation in future we will found a very big and famous scientist, enginer, doctor or pilot in future instead of big mafias, drug dealer and almost our half young generation in prison.

I conclude this to continuing our studies after school is a very important for us we just get a base in school we can build our future by continuing studies in universties and colleges if we want to do som good jobs in future ratehr then doing odd jobs like working in takeway, cab, doordash doing security shifts.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you consider increased participation in further education a positive development. You support this with relevant points, including keeping young people engaged, improving their future prospects, and potentially producing professionals such as scientists, engineers and doctors. These examples show a response to the question, but the discussion is uneven: the claim that education will reduce crime is asserted rather than explained, and the benefits of having a wider range of courses are not directly explored. The comparison with “odd jobs” also needs more careful development, since such work is not necessarily a negative outcome. Explain how course choice benefits different students and support each main point with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an overall structure: an introduction, two paragraphs presenting reasons, and a conclusion that restates your view. This makes the main direction understandable. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are packed into long sentences, particularly the paragraph beginning “According to my observation.” Connections between claims are also sometimes mechanical or unclear, as in “and in result” and “as per my preception.” Use one central idea per paragraph, then explain and illustrate it in a clear sequence. More precise linking and referencing would help readers see how the examples about social media, crime and career prospects support your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to education and society, including “independent,” “professional,” “motivation,” and “future,” and you give examples of occupations to make your ideas concrete. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling problems make parts of the response difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “in worldwide,” “big examples,” and “secure there future” are not natural in this context; spelling errors such as “persuing,” “univerties,” and “enginer” also reduce clarity. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling carefully. Prefer precise expressions such as “around the world,” “role models,” and “improve their future prospects.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate a consistent opinion and attempt to connect ideas using clauses, for example in “if students make there self busy in study.” However, sentence structures are often difficult to control, and some errors obscure relationships between ideas. The opening, “there is a significant number of students are increasing,” combines incompatible structures; “this have a very positive impact” also has incorrect subject–verb agreement. Sentence boundaries and capitalization are inconsistent, with several sentences beginning in lowercase and long stretches joined without clear punctuation. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. For example: “More students are continuing their education. This can improve their career prospects because they gain specialist skills.”

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