Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.0)

introduction

the pie chart describe the answers by teachers of abroad language in UK to a survey concerning what is the reason student learn the the foreign language .the first below that the reason and the second change the reason learning the foreign language.

In the first chart show that much of the student learning the language for travel while the second report most people learning the language buying the property overseas.The main effect in the second report travel fall in 3 percent . In the first report travel stand in 33 percent buying property and foreign partner increase in the second report and all other decrease in the other second report

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to describe the charts, the information provided is incomplete and lacks a clear overview. You have identified some data points, but the analysis is fragmented and fails to clearly distinguish between the two charts or explain the trends effectively. To improve, ensure you provide a clear introduction, a summary of the main trends (overview), and detailed supporting paragraphs that cover all key features of the data. The current response is too brief to fully address the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no logical paragraphing, and the transition between ideas is abrupt and confusing. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often inaccurate, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of information. For example, the jump from the first chart to the second is not clearly signaled. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, and employ linking words such as 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'consequently' to connect your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'abroad language' instead of 'foreign language' and 'buying the property' instead of 'buying property.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion,' 'percentage,' 'fluctuate,' and 'significant increase.' Expanding your range of synonyms and ensuring correct word forms will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the pie chart describe'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. The writing relies on simple, often fragmented sentences, and there is a lack of complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using complex sentences with subordinating conjunctions to improve your grammatical range.

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