Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graphs illustrate reply by teachers of international languages in Britain to a monitoring related about the reason of learning a foreign language. Moreover, it also about the percentage of teachers reporting about most common reasons for learning.

Overall, the percentages of buying property overseas and business/work increased significantly while, the others would be similar or dropped. On the other side of pie chart, it highlights different proportions of increase in individuals learning. In this side, the percentage of personal development and the foreign partner would be similar percentage while, the buying property overseas is greater than the others.

So, in the first graph the lowest percentage is foreign partner and general interest which is 3% and 5%. While, the personal development and social contacts is same approximately 7%. Moreover, the greater proportion is travel which is likely 33%, business and work is closely to 26% and buying property overseas is 19%.

Following that in the last graph it shows the report of rise in people learning. the highest percentage is buying property overseas which is 34% and other would be lower than that such the personal development and foreign is exactly similar which 4% while, the least is travel which is 3% nearly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task but lacks a clear overview of the data trends. While you mention that some percentages increased or decreased, the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state that 'buying property overseas' is the highest in the second chart, but the data provided in the text is inconsistent with the visual information. Furthermore, the report fails to clearly distinguish between the two charts, leading to confusion. To improve, ensure you accurately report the key features and provide a clear, concise summary of the main trends without listing every single data point, which makes the report feel like a list rather than an analytical summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'On the other side of pie chart' and 'Following that in the last graph'. These transitions do not effectively link the ideas or guide the reader through the data. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow which chart or data point is being discussed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic phrasing. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'reply by teachers' instead of 'responses from teachers' and 'monitoring related' instead of 'survey regarding'. You also struggle with collocations, for example, 'the percentage of personal development... would be similar'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the reliance on simple vocabulary prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding your range of academic vocabulary and focusing on accurate collocations will help improve this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the lowest percentage is foreign partner and general interest which is 3% and 5%', and incorrect article usage throughout. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'the personal development and foreign is exactly similar which 4%'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using articles correctly. Proofreading for these common errors will help you achieve a higher level of accuracy.

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