Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.0)

There are the many reasons students are learning a foreign languages . Many purpose students wants to go abroad . The survey held in a university according to the survey we get a different purpose and its ratio why students are learning a foreign languages. 33% student are learning foreign languages to the purpose of traveling these students likes to travel in foreign countries and explore the culture so they should learn the foreign languages. According the survey 26 % students Learned foreign languages for the purpose of business. They went to abroad in the business matter and 19 % those who want to buying overseas property these type of people making overseas property 5% those students they have general interest in abroad and 7% has a social contacts in abroad and 7% has personal development and 3% those people they have foreign partner. This is the total survey .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the task requirements adequately. While it lists the percentages provided in the chart, it lacks an overview or a summary of the main trends, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 report. Furthermore, the second chart mentioned in the prompt—regarding the 'recent change' in reasons—is completely ignored. The response reads more like a list of data points rather than an analytical report. To improve, you must provide a clear overview of the most significant data and ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and paragraphing. It is written as a single, dense block of text, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices; sentences are loosely connected, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. For example, the transition between the different categories is repetitive and mechanical (e.g., '5% those students', '7% has a social contacts'). To achieve a higher band, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, often relying on basic phrasing that does not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'business matter' instead of 'business purposes' and 'buying overseas property' used as a noun phrase. The phrasing 'these type of people' is grammatically incorrect and stylistically weak. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology related to data description and avoid repeating the same structures for every data point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many purpose students wants', '33% student are learning'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as '5% those students they have general interest'. The lack of proper punctuation and the misuse of prepositions (e.g., 'according the survey') further detract from the quality of the writing. A significant focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for agreement errors is necessary.

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