Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.0)

As this era of world is advance and peoples are looking for much more options to upgrade their lifestyles and they are making it possible by learning different languages first and most hyped reason is travelling where people's came to explore the world and traditions of different nations and tie their bonds with them second reason is business/work due to decline in opportunities in their homeland

Third reason is peoples expanding their resources to cash out opportunities in different parts of world that are boosting their economies and peoples are buying properties there to have benefits in future

Fourth reason is due to personal development because it helps them to know different languages so that in any case it will work it out

Fifth reason is social contacts because many individuals due to their commitments and social or family bonding they came in touch with other people's that are from different parts of world to contact them

Last but not the least to learn language is just to pass the time and indulge them in any activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. You have not described the data provided in the pie charts; instead, you have provided a subjective, essay-style commentary on why people learn languages. There is no mention of the survey percentages, the specific categories shown in the charts, or the second chart regarding the 'recent change' in reasons. To achieve a higher band, you must objectively report the data, identify key trends, and make comparisons between the categories. The current response is entirely off-topic as a data report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks paragraphing and logical structure. It is written as a single, long, run-on sentence with minimal punctuation, making it difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; instead, you use repetitive transitions like 'second reason', 'third reason', and 'fourth reason'. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and specific details supported by the data. The lack of proper sentence boundaries significantly hinders the flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on informal or imprecise phrasing such as 'most hyped reason', 'cash out opportunities', and 'work it out'. There is a lack of academic vocabulary suitable for describing statistical data, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'significant', or 'minority'. Furthermore, there are frequent errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'peoples' (used incorrectly as a plural of person) and 'in this era of world'. You need to expand your range to include more precise, formal terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical control is very weak. The entire response consists of a series of run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to parse. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'peoples are looking', 'people's came') and article usage. You have not demonstrated the ability to use complex sentence structures accurately. To improve, focus on writing shorter, grammatically complete sentences and mastering basic punctuation, such as using periods to separate distinct ideas rather than relying on conjunctions.

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