Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Pio charts illustrate the response by teachers of foreign languages in United Kingdom to conduct a survey why their students are learning a foreign language. There are two pie chart first illustrates the main reason of why while second one is about how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason

Overall, in first chart by teachers is reporting that 33 percentage learners English to travel abroad. Second number is 19% by those who wants to buy property overseas. Other reason are 7 percentage by those who wants personal development and same number by social contacts and 5 percentage are those people who has general interest in learning a new language and last are those whose partner are from abroad that are 3%

Second chart is about teachers reporting the recent boost in people learning for the news reasons. 34% buying property overseas, where 19% for business or work while 15% for social contacts meanwhile 4% for foreign partners and 6% for general interest and 15% is no change then 3% for traveling and 4% for personal development.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both pie charts, but the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview. While you identify the main reasons, you fail to synthesize the data or highlight significant trends or contrasts effectively. The report reads more like a list of statistics rather than a cohesive summary of the information provided. To improve, ensure you include a clear 'overview' paragraph that summarizes the most striking features of the data, such as the shift in priorities between the two charts. Furthermore, the data presentation is somewhat disorganized, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the main findings quickly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'Second number is', 'Second chart is'). There is a lack of linking words to connect ideas within sentences, which makes the text feel disjointed. For example, the transition between the first and second chart is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'whereas', or 'consequently' to guide the reader through your analysis. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that sentences flow logically from one to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrasing, such as 'those who wants to' and 'percentage by those'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'recent boost in people learning for the news reasons' and 'last are those whose partner are from abroad'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a more varied range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise academic terminology. Avoid repeating the same structures and try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations related to data description, such as 'the primary motivation', 'a significant proportion', or 'a notable shift'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('those who wants', 'reason are'), missing articles ('in United Kingdom'), and awkward sentence structures ('Pio charts illustrate the response by teachers... to conduct a survey why'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and article usage. Additionally, try to incorporate more complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, to improve the flow and sophistication of your writing. Proofreading for basic errors is essential to ensure clarity.

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