Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrate answering through teachers of abroad languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their children are learning a foreign speaking. The one bar chart represents the most important point for learning a abroad speaking. The other bar chart demonstrate how many teachers felt that there has been a currently different in the reason.

Overall, the percentage of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning. The one bar chart shows the main reason is travelling and business or work. And the other bar chart illustrate the how many teachers felt that is social contact and buying property overseas.

The first pie chat depict the % of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning to highest percentage is travelling, buying property overseas and business or work are (19% ,25%,33%) after that, the personal development and social contact is equal(7%) then, the general interest and foreign partner is lowest(3%,5%).

The second pie chart shows the percentage of teachers reporting recent increase in people learning for the following reasons to the highest percentage is buying property overseas and business or work(34%,19%) after that, the personal development and foreign partner are equal percentage(4%,4%) then,the social contact and no change are equal(15%,15%) and the end is that the general interest and the travelling is moderate percentage(6%,3%).

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task by describing the two charts. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and confusing manner. While you identify some data points, the report lacks a clear overview or a logical synthesis of the information. The description of the data is often inaccurate or difficult to follow, such as when you list percentages without clearly linking them to the categories. To improve, ensure you group related data together and provide a clear summary of the main trends rather than just listing figures. The report fails to clearly distinguish between the two different charts in a way that makes the information easy for the reader to interpret.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The progression of ideas is often disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes incorrect, such as the repetitive use of 'The one bar chart' and 'The other bar chart'. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, making it difficult to follow the comparison of the data. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus. Referencing is also inconsistent, which hinders the overall clarity of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'abroad languages' instead of 'foreign languages', 'children' instead of 'students', and 'foreign speaking' instead of 'foreign language'. The phrasing is often repetitive, and there is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for an academic report. To improve, focus on learning accurate collocations related to data description, such as 'the highest proportion', 'a significant increase', or 'remained stable'. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends will significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The bar chart illustrate'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures. The attempt at complex sentences is limited, and many sentences are grammatically incomplete or incorrectly punctuated. For example, 'The one bar chart represents the most important point for learning a abroad speaking' is awkward and grammatically flawed. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for simple errors would also be highly beneficial.

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