Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie charts illustrate Canadian devices people which were 18 to 25 years old and spent time on television in 2009 and 2019.

Overall, at the beginning of the period the conventional TV was used by one-third people, while the least time consumed device was tablet. In comparison, at the end of the period highly watched device was Flat-screen TV and conventional TV became unpopular.

Flat-screen TV device watched by people 8% in 2009 and increased more than threefold to 27% in 2019. The use of mobile phone was 15% in 2009 and made second largest contribution in chart which is 26% in 2019. The tablet was the smallest segment in 2009 pie chart and made up the significant addition after ten years.

The most used device was Conventional TV which comprises approximately one- third of the chart that is 34% in 2009 and it was the smallest segment in 2019. Laptop and desktop computer devices were highly useable in first decade of twenty-first century that is 20% and 18% respectively, and both showed the same value in 2019 which is 12%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for a report on a survey regarding why students learn foreign languages, but the student has written about television and device usage among 18-25-year-olds. Because the content does not address the provided prompt at all, it fails to meet the requirements of the task. Even if the data were relevant, the description of the trends is somewhat confusing and lacks a clear overview of the actual survey data requested. To improve, ensure you carefully read the prompt and analyze the specific data provided in the charts before beginning your report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In comparison', and 'In the first decade'. However, because the content is entirely irrelevant to the prompt, the logical progression is undermined. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'one-third people', which lacks a preposition. While the structure follows the conventions of a report, the lack of connection to the actual task makes the coherence ineffective.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for describing trends (e.g., 'increased more than threefold', 'smallest segment', 'made up the significant addition'). However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'highly watched device' instead of 'most popular device' and 'highly useable' instead of 'commonly used'. The range is limited, and the errors occasionally make the meaning slightly awkward, though the reader can generally understand the intended message regarding the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'the conventional TV was used by one-third people' (missing 'of'), 'Flat-screen TV device watched by people' (missing a verb), and 'made second largest contribution in chart' (missing articles). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to demonstrate a lack of control over complex structures. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the grammatical inaccuracies are persistent throughout the text.

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