Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Information regarding the percentage of teachers who following common reason for learning and report current incline in individuals learning language in Britian is illustrated by pie chart.

In conclusion, it is crystal clear that the proportion of tutors who reported business reason is the highest for learning, whereas the percentage of mentors who noted recent escalate in masses for travel learning is the lowest.

According to the pie chart, the percentile of educators who reported personal development and social contacts reasons for learning was stable by 7%,this proportion was 3%,5% and 19% in foreign partner, general interest and buying property overseas respectively . A difference of 7% could be seen in the percentile of travel and business.

Moving further, the proportion of tutors who noted recent rise in personal development and foreign partner was constant by 4% for learning. This percentage of general interest(6%) was double of by travel (3%). That percentage for buying property overseas was 34%, which was more than by 19% in business. Social contact and no change show the simillar proportion by 15%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task, but the analysis is significantly flawed. You have failed to accurately interpret the data, often misstating the figures or making illogical comparisons. For instance, you describe the 'business' category as the highest, while the chart shows 'buying property overseas' as the dominant reason. Furthermore, the report lacks a clear overview of the main trends, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. The information is presented in a fragmented way, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the key features of the data. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant trends and grouping data logically rather than listing individual percentages.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks logical progression. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moving further' and 'In conclusion', they are often used inappropriately or do not effectively link the ideas. The paragraphing is ineffective, as the conclusion is placed at the beginning, and the body paragraphs do not follow a clear structure. There is a lack of clear referencing, and the relationship between the two charts is not clearly explained. The overall arrangement of information is confusing, which hinders the reader's ability to follow the report's logic.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and frequently inaccurate. You use terms like 'percentile' when you mean 'percentage', and 'escalate in masses' is an unnatural collocation. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'mentors' for 'teachers' and 'foreign partner' as a category label, which does not accurately reflect the data provided. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise terminology for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'significant', 'majority', and 'fluctuation'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with article usage ('the pie chart' vs 'a pie chart'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. For example, 'the percentile of educators who reported... was stable by 7%' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. Many sentences are poorly constructed, making the meaning unclear. You rely on simple structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. Improving your control over basic sentence patterns and ensuring correct preposition usage is essential for progress.

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