Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.5)

So I would like to share the data percentage of students who are learning the foreign language which were reported by teachers in Britain .

The highest number of students percentage is 33 who wants to learn foreign language ,the only reason is travel , on the second 26 percent of students learns the language for Bussiness or work , on third the 19 percent of students learn because they want to buy property overseas fourth number students who learns language the reason is personal development and the same percentage is for the those who learns for social contracts , five percent students are who learns because of general interest and last one are three percent students who learns because of there foreign partners

So now let’s talk about of teachers reporting

Increased interest in learning the foreign language

So the reason percentage is given below

Buying property overseas is highest 34percent

Bussiness or work is 19 percent

Social contracts is 15 percent

General interest is 6 percent

Foreign partner 4 percent

Travel 3 percent

Personal development 4 percent

The lowest percentage is travel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to cover the data provided in the two pie charts. However, it fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. The tone is informal and conversational, using phrases like 'So I would like to share' and 'So now let’s talk about'. There is no overview or summary of the main trends, which is a critical requirement for this task. Furthermore, the data is presented as a list rather than an analytical report. To improve, you must adopt a formal, objective tone, group the data logically, and provide a clear summary of the most significant features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical progression and clear paragraphing. The use of cohesive devices is extremely limited and mechanical, relying on repetitive structures like 'on the second', 'on third', and 'fourth number'. There is no effective use of linking words to connect ideas or compare the two charts. The structure is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two sets of data. To improve, you should use a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') and ensure each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on the words provided in the prompt. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'social contracts' (likely meaning 'social contacts') and 'Bussiness' (spelling error). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. You should aim to use more varied and accurate terminology to describe data, such as 'account for', 'represent', 'the majority of', and 'a significant proportion'. Expanding your vocabulary to include synonyms for 'reason' and 'increase' will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'students who learns', 'the same percentage is for the those who learns'), article usage, and sentence structure. The writing consists mostly of simple, fragmented sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which are necessary for higher band scores. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and punctuation. Additionally, try to incorporate more complex sentence forms, such as relative clauses or passive voice, to describe the data more formally.

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