Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.5)

We have two pie charts and both of the charts representing the reasons of students learning foreign language. Lets discuss first chart we have visible number of 33% traveling is the major reason to learn about foreign language also the business work. In both situations we interact with the citizens of the country. To know about their local language can make termendous impact. Third main reason is buying property overseas. If we are interested in another country , lets take an example. If I will plan to buy property in japan, than I also have a plan in a future I will move in japan. For this reason I will learn their lanaguage. The personal development, social contacts, general interest and foreign partner are not the important main reasons. As we can see clearly highly surge in buying property ratio that's why people learn a foreign lanaguage and the business work also. As we can compare the reason of travel is not any more to learn a foreign language.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task requirements. While it mentions the pie charts, it does not provide a clear overview or a systematic description of the data. The report is highly subjective, incorporating personal anecdotes (e.g., 'If I will plan to buy property in japan') rather than objectively reporting the data provided in the prompt. Furthermore, the second chart mentioned in the prompt—concerning the recent change in reasons—is completely ignored in the analysis. The response lacks a formal tone and fails to highlight key features or trends, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. It is written as a single, disorganized paragraph rather than a formal report with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a summary. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused, such as 'Lets discuss first chart' and 'As we can see clearly'. There is no clear progression of ideas; the transition between describing the data and the author's personal hypothetical scenarios is abrupt and confusing. The lack of paragraphing makes the text difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on informal phrasing. There are several spelling errors, such as 'termendous' instead of 'tremendous' and 'lanaguage' instead of 'language'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe data trends accurately; for example, the phrase 'highly surge' is grammatically incorrect and imprecise. The student struggles to use academic collocations appropriate for a report, relying instead on conversational language that does not suit the task requirements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are significant issues with verb tenses and sentence structure, such as 'both of the charts representing' (should be 'represent') and 'the reason of travel is not any more to learn' (which is unclear). Many sentences are fragmented or poorly constructed, such as 'Lets discuss first chart we have visible number of 33%'. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors in basic subject-verb agreement and preposition usage.

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