Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts represent comparison between proportion of main reason for learning a foreign language and teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Overall, maximum people wanted to travel in first chart but in the second chart buying property overseas. In both pie chart comparatively totally different in their people what to do.

Firstly, in first chart people involved in personal development and social contacts equally which is 7% and minimum persons wanted be a foreign partner and pay general interest (3%,5%) . Secondly, 33% people wanted to travel and 26% was business/work la

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely limits your ability to address the task. You have failed to describe the data comprehensively, leaving out large sections of the charts. The overview is confusing and inaccurate, as you misinterpret the second chart by stating 'buying property overseas' is the main reason, which is not supported by the provided data. Because the response is incomplete and fails to present a clear, accurate summary of the information, it does not meet the requirements for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a logical structure. While you attempt to use transition words like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly', the progression of ideas is disjointed. Paragraphing is not used effectively, and the sentences do not flow logically from one to the next. The lack of a clear introduction and a coherent conclusion makes the report difficult to follow. Additionally, the referencing is unclear, making it hard for the reader to understand which chart or data point you are referring to at any given time.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'maximum people' and 'minimum persons', which are not appropriate for an academic report. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'pay general interest' and the incomplete sentence at the end. To improve, you need to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'the majority', 'a significant proportion', or 'the lowest percentage'. The current range is insufficient to convey the information accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'The charts represent comparison' (missing an article) and 'In both pie chart comparatively totally different'. Sentence structures are simplistic and often fragmented. You struggle with basic sentence construction, which makes the text feel disjointed. To reach a higher band, you must focus on using correct articles, prepositions, and more complex sentence structures while ensuring that your basic grammar is accurate.

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