Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the given pie charts illustrate the survey of foreign languages in Britain additionally responses by teachers.

overall, we see two charts first one shows the reasons why some people learn other mother tongue. in addition other one show the felling of teachers in recent changes.

At the begin, the first one individual prefer to learn foreign mother tongue the common reasons in bar chart the highest is for travel and second highest is for business or work. Third one is buying property. and then the lowest is for foreign partner. other three one is bit similar to them like personal development or social contrasts are exact same additionally general interest is little bit similar.

moreover, the second chart show the teachers reporting the recent increase in people learning reasons for several reasons first the highest is buying property second one is business/work in addition lowest is travel or two are exact same no charge or social contrasts on the other hand foreign partner or personal development is also same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately describe the data. While it mentions the two charts, the information provided is fragmented and lacks a clear overview or meaningful comparison. The student lists categories but fails to accurately interpret the percentages or the relationship between the data points. For instance, phrases like 'other three one is bit similar' are too vague to convey the specific information required for an Academic Task 1 report. The response lacks a clear summary of the main trends, which is essential for this task. Consequently, the information is not well-developed, and the report does not provide a clear picture of the survey results for the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical progression. While there are attempts at paragraphing, the sentences within them are disjointed and often confusing. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and frequently misused, such as 'At the begin' and 'moreover' used to introduce unrelated points. The referencing is unclear, making it difficult to follow which chart or data point is being discussed. There is no clear structure to the report, and the lack of effective linking words means the ideas do not flow logically from one to the next, which significantly hinders the reader's ability to follow the analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. The student uses non-standard phrasing such as 'other mother tongue' and 'social contrasts' (likely misinterpreting 'social contacts'). There is significant repetition of basic words like 'one', 'reason', and 'highest'. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology to describe data, such as 'bit similar' or 'exact same', which are not suitable for an academic report. The lack of precision in word choice makes the report difficult to understand, and the student does not demonstrate the range of vocabulary required to describe trends or comparisons effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the second chart show'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. The writing relies almost entirely on simple, poorly constructed sentences. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and misused periods. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the errors are so frequent that they distract the reader throughout the text. The overall control of grammar is weak, and the lack of accurate punctuation further complicates the readability of the report.

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