Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The pie charts which is described in two separate module one is how many percentage of teachers reporting the following as most common for learning and the seconde one is how many percentage of teachers reporting recent increse in people learning for the following reasons.

If we see the first chart of teachers in this chat 3% of foreign partner which is less from seconde chart which is 4% foreign partner and if we look to persnole developments so in first chart is 7% and in 2nd chart the personle developments is 4% which is less thand first chart and if we go forward social contact so in first chart is 7% and in seconde chart is 15% in which we could say the seconde chrt have high ration with social contacts general intrest in 1st chart is 5% and the seconde one 6% if we look buying properties oversease in first chart the percentage is 19% and seconde one 34% and in bussines work 19% in seconde chart and in first chart 26% and the last is travel which is 33% for first chart and the seconde one is 3%

and the 15% no change in seconde chart.

So we anlize that some difference occure in different situation

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the two pie charts regarding foreign language learning reasons and teachers' views on recent changes. However, the attempt is severely constrained by the chaotic delivery and an inability to accurately report and compare the data. While the student mentions several categories such as 'foreign partner', 'personle developments', 'social contact', 'general intrest', 'buying properties oversease', 'bussines work', and 'travel', the data points are often jumbled together without a clear overview or logical grouping. Important overall trends are missed, and the data descriptions contain numerous inaccuracies when compared against the visual input. Consequently, the response addresses the task only partially, fulfilling the requirements of Band 4.0 as the information is presented in a very confused and minimally structured manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from a major lack of paragraphing, consisting essentially of two enormous, rambling run-on sentences that make reading extremely difficult. There is no clear logical organisation or progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or rudimentary and inaccurate, relying heavily on repetitive transition phrases like 'and if we look to' or 'in first chart is'. Referencing is frequently unclear, with pronouns and comparative links failing to guide the reader through the data in a logical fashion. Paragraphing is entirely absent. These issues firmly place the response at Band 4.0 for Coherence and Cohesion, as information and ideas are not arranged in a coherent sequence.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently revolving around simple terms like 'chart', 'first', 'seconde', and percentages. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'seconde', 'increse', 'persnole', 'developments', 'thand', 'chrt', 'intrest', 'oversease', 'bussines', 'anlize', and 'occure'. The limited range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss academic data with any degree of precision or flexibility, and the frequent lexical errors strain the reader's comprehension. This level of performance aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors, where vocabulary is basic and errors repeatedly occur in spelling and word choice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatically, the response is extremely weak, consisting almost entirely of long, run-on structures joined incorrectly by conjunctions like 'and' rather than proper punctuation or dependent clauses. There is a complete absence of accurate complex sentence forms; attempts at complex or relative clauses result in major structural errors, such as 'The pie charts which is described in two separate module one is...'. Punctuation is virtually non-existent, leading to sentences that span multiple lines without periods. Errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and tense are pervasive throughout the text and frequently impede communication. This corresponds to a Band 4.0, where structures are very limited and frequent errors distort meaning.

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