Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Poeple have many reasons for learning, but in this piechat about 7% of people study for personal development which is very important in every individual. in the other hand, about 3% of in dividuals study as a result of their foreign partiner as to catch up with their beusneses and for a better understanding in their communication.In social contents, about 5% individuals also study to improve themselves. Some up to 26% individuals sudy as a result of geting a better job or to do business to growin diverse ways in the society.33% of individual study to travel and gaine experiences, do business abrod to make money for investment and for many other things.19%of individuals do study to obtain or buy propert overseas like houses, companies and many others acording to their demands and desires. 15% of individuals study for for no change , just to stud for no good intention for themselves.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You include several figures from the first chart, such as 33% for travel, 26% for business/work and 19% for buying property overseas. However, the report does not accurately describe the charts as a whole: it omits the second chart’s key pattern, including the 34% reporting an increase in property-related learning and the 19% for business/work, and it gives 15% as a reason for learning even though this is the “no change” response in that chart. Some first-chart details are also misreported: social contacts is 7%, not 5%, and the foreign-partner figure is not linked to the explanation you give. A clear overview comparing the main reasons and reported changes is needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response moves through several chart categories, so a reader can identify some of the figures being discussed. However, there is no clear report structure: it begins with individual details rather than an overview, and it does not separate the two charts into a logical comparison. Connections between ideas are often unclear, as in “33% of individual study to travel and gaine experiences, do business abrod,” where several possible reasons are joined together. The repeated use of “in the other hand” and “also” does not establish accurate relationships between the data. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs comparing the main figures in each chart; use linking phrases only where the relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “personal development,” “social contacts,” “business,” and “property,” and you attempt to describe purposes such as travel and work. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate, which makes parts of the report difficult to interpret. Examples include “piechat,” “foreign partiner,” “beusneses,” “social contents,” and “propert overseas.” Some phrases are also unsuitable for reporting survey data, such as “just to stud for no good intention,” which adds an unsupported judgement. Use the chart’s exact category labels and practise accurate collocations such as “learn for work-related reasons” and “teachers reported an increase.” Proofreading spelling would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and some basic information can be understood, for example, “33% of individual study to travel.” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or poorly controlled. In “Some up to 26% individuals sudy as a result of geting a better job,” the opening phrase does not form a clear grammatical sentence, and “as a result of geting” is not followed by a suitable noun phrase. There are also recurring problems with articles, plurals, agreement and punctuation, as in “19%of individuals do study” and the run-on sequence beginning “33% of individual study.” Build accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses, and use full stops to separate distinct points.

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