Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

% of teachers reporting the following as most common reason for learning:

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie charts illustrates responses by teachers of foreign language in britain to survey concerning their students are learning a forgien language.The first charts shows the main reason for learning a foreign language and second chart shows how many teachers felt that.

Overall,first chart seemed percentage the highest proporation of traven 33 percentages froigen language when lowest proporation of forgein travel 3percentages.whenvevr,the rose to 34 percentages of buying property when gradually increased foreign partner of 4 percentages.

The pie charts seem first devided different categories in seven topic common lerning is stadualy increased travel in 33 proporation when, 7 proporation of personal development ,similarly,general interest ,buying property also business work than lowest proporation of 3 percentages of foreign pertner.

The second charts domonstrates diverse features eight topic when percentages of reporting recent increase in people learning for following reasons.The highest percentages of buying property overseas 34porporation when lowest proporaton of travel than 3 percentages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify some relevant features, including travel as the leading main reason (33%) and buying property overseas as the largest reported recent increase (34%). However, the report is incomplete and several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: foreign partner is the smallest category in the first chart, not “foreign travel,” and the second chart also includes 15% reporting no change, which you omit. The overview does not clearly summarise the contrast between the charts, and several figures are described without a clear relationship to the categories. The response also falls 13 words short of the 150-word minimum; the 17 words copied from the prompt are not counted. Add a fuller overview and accurately compare key categories in both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, moving from an introduction to an overview and then descriptions of the charts. Some linking expressions, such as “Overall,” “similarly,” and “when,” show an effort to connect information. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview mixes figures from both charts and the later paragraphs repeat points without clearly distinguishing the charts. For example, the second paragraph moves from travel to buying property without explaining the comparison, while the final paragraph repeats the 34% figure. Use one paragraph for the main-reason chart and one for the recent-change chart, and connect each figure explicitly to its category.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “proportion,” “categories,” and “recent increase,” so the reader can recognise that the charts are being described. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or inaccurately formed, and spelling errors frequently make key terms harder to understand: “proporation,” “forgein,” “lerning,” and “domonstrates” are examples. Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “the highest proportion of travel” and “the rose to 34 percentages.” Choose precise chart language and check spelling and collocations. For instance, describe a category as “accounted for 33%” and use “the largest share” rather than repeatedly using “proportion.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences and use basic comparison structures, but sentence control is inconsistent. The opening, “The pie charts illustrates responses,” has subject–verb disagreement, and “students are learning a foreign language” is not correctly connected to the survey description. Articles and plural forms are also frequently missing or inaccurate, as in “the first charts” and “33 percentages.” Several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, making relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Most sentences rely on simple patterns, with limited accurate use of complex structures. Build clear sentences around one comparison at a time, check singular and plural agreement, and use standard percentage constructions such as “33% of teachers reported travel.”

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